Obsessed

Self-Published

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Description

Jake is the average teenager. He has lived life so far doing a little bit of everything but coming into year 12 he sticks to studying and tries to avoid going out too much. he finds his obsession with one of his class mates coming back to him however. Harley Herndrickson is the schools 'bad boy' and is everything Jake is not. Jake finds himself unable to keep away but will end well? is there someone else for him? follow Jake as he lays out his obsession for you.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: sugarmay1234

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.0/ 5.0
Views: 1,896

Chapters(14 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

Ayuman2007Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
From the Synopsis you will likely assume that this is the story of some quiet loner child that slowly becomes obsessed with the school jock. That impression is wrong. The main character is someone who likes people who don't pay him attention and already have partners. He is a teachers pet who hates teenagers while he himself is one. He has a friend and is wrote to be a nerd, but isn't presented as one. Show not tell.
The grammar is acceptable, while writing style resembles typical 16 year old Wattpad writer.
We seem to get straight into the story at the end of chapter 2, so pacing is at least alright. Characterisation is not that good. Dialogue feels unnatural. Some letters aren't capitalized when they should be.
Humour is kinda like Family Guy, but without the setup. I mean, there are setups, but the jokes don't land.
Some sentences aren't understandable on the first reading, due to either poor grammar or straight up words placed at the wrong place.
--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------In short, slightly worse than average, wouldn't recommend reading, but also wouldn't necessarily tell someone not to read it, some people might like it. The type of people that will like this will be rare, but some can and might enjoy it. Mostly teenagers, around the ages of 12-15.