Notale [OLD]

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THIS IS AN OLD VERSION OF NOTALE! THE REWRITE WILL BE COMING OUT SOON.

"A smile will get you far, but a smile and a sword will get you farther."

In the city of Lightfall, where magic divides the rich and the poor, a streetwise orphan named Night survives by outwitting thieves and tricking gangs in the rain-soaked alleys of the Outskirts. But when his remaining family is destroyed in a hellish blaze and an ancient power awakens within him, his world shatters overnight.

Discovered to be a Void user – a power the all-powerful Light Kingdom fear above all – Night is torn from survival into the deadly games of Valour Academy, where magical strength earns respect and secrets are worth more than gold. Hunted by those who would betray him, destroy him, or help him, Night must unravel the truth behind his magic while navigating the ghosts of rebellion.

...As those ghosts are beginning to stir.

Can one boy’s darkness become hope, or will it consume the entire world?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Kimyona Shonen

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
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Views: 4,899

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Community Reviews(3)

KerryRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story started with a bam. In your face fight scene of the Hero vs. the Villain. Who is the good person, and who is the bad person?
With this novel, you will explore the good and the bad. The concept isn't new, but the way it's executed is brilliant.
We follow Night as he's on his revenge tour against EVIL?? It's a fun ride so far.
I can't really say much about the grammar or the style of the story; overall, it's 5 stars.
So please, author, keep up your amazing work. Looking forward to more chapters.
CardocRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Hello guys! Here's my review!
I like the start, especially the first chapter.
I do think it's a good start for a novel, especially in a website like RR where readers are after fights, action, magic and etc. so props to you author! I do think the first chapter could be a bit longer, though.
About the characters: It’s still early, but I enjoyed the interactions, especially in chapter 2. The dialogue felt natural and did a great job of showcasing the characters’ personalities in a “show, don’t tell” kind of way.
Style: I do think the start is a bit non-linear, and that might scare some readers off, but I enjoyed it. Maybe a bit more description here and there, to make the story more alive, but I actually think this type of straightforward prose/style does quite well here on royal road. If you like fast paced and no stalling/fillers, this is for you!
About grammar: Not much to be said. It's good. Maybe some tiny bits here and there, but nothing that bothered me too much.
Anyway, that's it! This has potential, so give it a try!
ZacheasRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The concept for this story is pretty good. Basically imagine a fantasy world where being a hero is a job and being a villian just means you are opposed to the heros. The ideas of being good or bad are divorced from those titles. It's not a new concept by any means. Plenty of stories play off how heros are not all good or how heros can be a hero to some but villian to others. Or how power and prestige can corrupt heros.
The MC Knight in this story seems to be on his own little villian arch to get revenge for the death of his family.
Grammar and spelling. There are some grammar and word choice issues but it's not horrible.
Yhe auther did use emogis for his transitions which was very annoying when listening to the book.
Characters: None of the characters are very deeply developed. The author focused on being fast pace and moving the story along rather than developing the characters.
World building: There is very little world building in the chapters i'vecread for the same reason why there was little character development. The author does not spend time to describe things or explain things so that the reader can see it with their mind's eye. One example is the home town of the MC. none says the city's name. no one seems that broke up about it being destroyed, we know nothing about the place or why it was attacked.
The story has a lot of potential and the author should continue it. I do hope thatvhe comes back and expands on these chapters more. They are very short so adding more detail shouldn't be a problem as far as pacing and engagement.