New Life; New Hell

Self-Published

Community Rating

Description

What is the worst thing for you?Marcus only ever wanted a peaceful life and he nearly escaped the person which made his 18 years of life miserableIf he hadn't died, that is. He didn't stay dead, though.Follow Marcus on his quest to lead a peaceful life in a world which isn't peaceful at all._______________________(The mature tag is just to be sure, because I don't know where this story will lead )

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: MeMyselfAndI

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.2/ 5.0
Followers: 102
Views: 42,686

Chapters(16 total)

Reviews

No reviews yet. Be the first to share your thoughts!

Community Reviews(4)

InoueTsubasaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Mm, I started out reading this because everyone else in the group seemed to be talking about it, and I got curious since I didn't have anything better to do anyway. I continued on reading past the prologue and first 2 chapters because you seemed to want critiques on in and I wanted to give the entire thing a chance before saying anything. It's only fair, right?
At first, "Uh oh, not another weak and unfortunate main protagonist," was what I thought, but because you're my friend and I want to give you a serious answer to what I think about this, I won't settle for reading half and give you some half-ass critique. As the story progressed, I like how the main character develops friendships with his peers, even if it's unintentionally; he got upgrades, which is something I think I kind of expected but was relieved to have seen that happening. Now I'm really intrigued as to how the story would be told in later chapters.
I did tell you not many original fictions get me going, and I was serious about that. Something about your style of writing makes the entire read pleasant and light-hearted. The only reason why I gave you a 4 instead of a 5 out of 5 star is your use of commas, full stops, spellings, and other grammatical mistakes. It's something worth looking into as it can potentially affect the flow of mood of the entire story.
Good luck!
-Tsubasa
SindaregionRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Treat this review as a Response to the one by Slaggedfire:
Uhhhh…. The entire point of this prologue was to give the MC obstacles to overcome and to make you hate the villain. It accomplished that job swimmingly; I am 100% sure everyone hates ‘the asshole’ and now sympathizes with the MC.
There’s literally only a prologue and the first chapter, which makes the rating hard to judge. For the readers who hate the MC’s reincarnation with the asshole, remember that the MC can get sweet revenge on the asshole unlike other stories.
Will follow this story.
—EDIT—
Although the beginning starts out dark, the rest of the story doesn’t follow the tone set in the prologue. Also, the rest of the kids are unrealistically accepting of Zeki, especially considering Zeki’s personality and the huge stigma associated with his appearance.
Grammar wise it is good except for a couple normal mistakes every now and then, and humongous paragraphs which need to be broken up each time the speaker changes.
SlaggedfireRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Update: It's still really sad and depressing but slowly the goddesses are realizing that they were fawning over a vile evil man and insulted the good guy. Eventually retribution will happen and since I am expecting it I will give this 3.5 stars. WHen it finally does happen if it's not good enough I will not increase my rating.
Not to mention kyle needs to suffer a fate worse than death before I stop reading.
jwrightRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
First off the tags are wrong.
Comedy? Awkward, forced, are rarely used.
Romance? None to speak of.
Action? None before the last chapter.
Adventure? None before the last chapter.
Original? Yes
Fantasy? Yes
Ok to start with this review I just want to say when I see comedy and don't see a tragedy tag, I expect it to be light hearted at least part of the time. This is wrong. If it's not being depressing it's just being nonchallant. There is no happiness in this book save what the villain is having.
Speaking of the villain and MC. Well this is your classic MC is the weak "good guy" who the villain portrays as the bad guy. Of course everything thinks the MC is the bad guy now. This is chapter after chapter of the MC getting put down by his fellow students. Same as his last lifetime, except maybe a bit worse.
Our antagonist makes out very well which is very frustrating except for the final chapter, where the author just stops writing so we get no closure at all.
In summary: Tags are wrong, this is a tragedy. Don't read this unless that's what you're here for.
I will update this if the tags are fixed.