Necro Romancer
Self-Published
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Description
In the imperial city of Sanctus Terra lives a young and talented magician, Mavis Grand, who have just gotten her heart broken yet again.
After drinking all day, she came to the conclusion that she will never find love and decides to end her life.
She ended up going to the graveyard instead and finds an unmaintained tombstone with the name "Lowell Necros" written on it.
One thing led to another involving law enforcers and she had to use necromancy to fend them off.
Follow the story of Mavis as she finally finds love in the most unexpected places.
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2025
- Author
- Meido no Hitori
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 3
- Views
- 1,303
Chapters(7 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- SerkadionRoyal Road★★★ 3.0I really wanted to like this story a bit more, because the initial premise is pretty fun - a practictioner of magic with absolutely terrible luck in men (possibly women too), gets drunk, accused of dine-and-dash (apparently a major felony in her city), ends up using necromancy, and raises an ancient evil magic user from the dead - as a skeleton with lots of holes in his memory.
The issue is that just in these three short chapters, the action has been moving at a blistering pace, and all of the sentences-- dialogue and otherwise-- are extremely short and choppy. I can't give any real reviews on characterization, as at this point, the initial characters aren't filled out at all, but there's time to do that for the main characters. The bit characters are mostly dead, or were just set decoration (the bar owner that charged her with dine and dash). I saw no real issues with spelling, and the grammar issues were mostly the aforesaid short sentences.
For quick entertainment, it's worth trying to read it; I just can't deal with the way it's written.
My suggestion for the author would be to fill out the characters a small amount, and make each chapter at least a third longer than it is right now. Finding an editor, or at least someone who writes regularly, would probably help in getting the sentence structure to flow better. The number one thing? Write more. You can't get better without practice.