My Twisted Heart

Self-Published

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Description

James might look like your average high school student at Crestwood Academy, a prestigious school for magic. But beneath the quiet, laid-back facade lies a dark secret: James is a trained assassin. Struggling to fit in, he’s determined to live a normal life and escape his deadly past. But balancing schoolwork, friendships, and magic isn’t easy—especially when you’ve been trained to solve problems with lethal precision. As James fights to keep his true identity hidden, the line between his two worlds starts to blur.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Dark Rose

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 83
Views: 4,033

Chapters(17 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

Shadow 482Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall Review
The novel initially shows potential but becomes monotonous due to excessive information on the same topics, leading readers to skim through. However, it manages to avoid major plot holes and common issues seen in similar stories. The characters are well-developed but occasionally feel rigid. Introducing chapters from different character perspectives could enhance immersion. Though there are occasional grammar errors, they are not significant. The author should aim for a balanced approach, engaging readers without overwhelming them. Creating a more immersive narrative would help the novel stand out among other options.
Story
The story starts with a lot of potential but becomes monotonous after a few chapters. There is a need to address the excessive information provided on the same topics, as it leads readers to skim through the text. Despite this drawback, the novel manages to avoid major plot holes and other common issues found in similar stories.
Style of Novel
The style of the novel is initially engaging but becomes repetitive as the story progresses. The excessive focus on the same topics creates a sense of monotony that hinders the overall reading experience. Striking a balance between providing enough detail to engage readers and avoiding excessive repetition is crucial for improving the style and making it more captivating.
Characters
The characters in the novel are well-developed, but at times, they feel too rigid. Introducing chapters from different character perspectives could enhance the overall immersion and provide readers with a more comprehensive understanding of the story. Adding this perspective could add depth and complexity to the characters, making them more relatable and dynamic.
Grammar
While there are occasional grammar errors, they are not significant enough to detract from the overall reading experience. It would be beneficial for the author to conduct a thorough proofreading to address these minor issues. Polishing the gramma
JSFattsRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I like this okay until the chapter where he accepts that one suspicious deal.
Grammar was fine. I really didn't see any glaring flaws.
His character was okay. He really needs to learn to not be so vengeful all the time, a little yes every second of his life no. I know that it's the kind of story it is but you really need to spread in more emotions or it just can seem one dimensional. I also get that it's not very far into the story so there's room to grow.
The story was okay. Kinda typical reincarnation revenge plot. But I like those so I won't complain lol. I really wish you got to see more interaction with his parents earlier on. It would set up the drama of if he actually wants to kill his father and could have softened him up a bit. Giving him more depth than revenge betrayal ra ra.
Style was fine I guess. Again no glaring flaws and I usually like this kinda thing.
Unfortunately I'm not going to read anymore of this story. Agreeing to deals with random voices in your head for power when the cost is you life is not something I care to read about. It's so foolish I can't take characters seriously after they do something like that.