My failed fanfic back in 2019

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Status

Hiatus

Author

Spirit Stone Merchant

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• THaD1USRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  For whatever reason the author decided to move on to webnovel this story already has 21 chapters on webnovel and it would seem he forgot to update this
• DalmoriRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  Boy oh boy, this one is hard to read.
  The grammar is pretty terrible, I have read some MTLs that where more palatable, but that´s something you can fix, and you writing this was probably in part to improve your english and thats ok.
  Storywise your ff has some potential, but you rush their development. If you don´t want to waste your time writing about their boring childhood, you don´t have to make them able to read and write at 1 1/2 years old. Its alright to just skip the time and have it be at least a bit more realistic. Haku treating people before his fourth birthday is just plainly speaking rediculous.
  Style. A lot of it probably is lost in the grammar but what is left isn´t particularly good either. The author uses a lot of the typical xianxia tropes like face, the laws, etc. A good example of how it should not be done is the character of the father. Shallow, for the most part emotionless, but as soon as his son tries to hunt a tiger he loses all face? Thats not how that concept generally speaking works, so I don´t put it solely as a character flaw.
  Characters... they are an issue. Simply put every side character in your story is a one dimensional idiot.
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  The mad God of Creation that waits for billions of years, but doesn´t bother investigating a powerful artefact he doesn´t understand and apparently has no way of finding.
  The mother that starts to hate her husband and contemplates killing him because her children are just so much better than him because they have time for her and the father has to do his job as village chief. And how dare he give the mc two months of house arrest?
  The father divorces the mother and throws out the mc because he thinks he lost the respect of his villagers, because of the mc being an overconfident and stupid child...
  As the story stands I can´t recommend it to anyone. You will have trouble finding a sentence without a mistake in it, the characters are boring and bring nothing unique to the table, the style is not