Mr. Vampire’s Wife

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Description

A succubus who travelled to the human realm in search of a good prey meets a handsome young man with a majestic aura at a bar. She asks him for a night just to feel addicted to his taste!

They meet each other again after a month and became partners in bed, only to find out that the man was already married! What will happen to this newly found partnership?

Author’s note: This novel is a fantasy story that doesn’t really have that much of a fantasy aspect. It focuses on more of the MC’s life so please keep that in mind!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: LizaKimika

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 2.7/ 5.0
Followers: 60
Views: 147,644

Chapters(211 total)

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HimRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
I usually don't review stories. Even less so when what I'm going to say is negative. But I'll try to stay constructive.(or a rant)
I only read up to chapter 15 do maybe it gets better after.
Let's start with the negative :
The chapter length is ridiculous. It's not even long enough for me to scroll.
The pacing is horrible and rushed
It's boring, as in where's the plot? I haven't felt the pull in the story or characters
Characters? A horni succubus that supposedly has fucked 5 times a week for years but acts like a betta virgin or a schoolgirl
The man is like an ass and a robot mixed in one.
The story feels like it was written by a teenager on a egotistical fantasy. Like the world building is bad and it feels like a self insert that praises the man.
Now I havent read enough to actually know why he is cheating but I just don't really care as the story doesn't bring you in.
Also did she rape him? Drugging is well .... But she's a demon so it's not like it's illogical but she doesn't behave like a demon.
The world building was kinda badly executed and boring
Also there's that split personality thing? Cliché
The man is her boss? Cliché (and was pulled out of nowhere she doesn't even know her ceo?
I don't even hate cliché but it's so badly written.
Also as a multi dys I don't usually realise there's bad grammar or anything hell my grammar is bad but yeah I realized..
And I don't really see any good here. Maybe the amount of chapters but their are so short
So what could the author do to make it enjoyable to read?
Fuse the chapters
Rename them. Like the name of the chapter spoils the story. Hell we could understand what happens in the story by reading the titles (and we wouldn't miss to much information per chapters)
Maybe redo the prologue make it a bit less jarring to read.
Explain why she doesn't know the man she has sex with for months is unknowingly her boss
Change the lilica in the first chapters. It's not normal that she actes like that after being like this.
Then to