monster evolution world

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Description

HE,the greatest player of the virtual reality game Monster Overlord in real life is a 34 year old neet and hikkimori that tragicaly died tripping over a rock and dying by getting crushed by Truck-san and getting reincarnated as his game character in a world where monsters rule and when monster have a certain cultivation they can turn intoa human and their monster forms evolve he has a game system while others don't everything except his skills and titles have vanished from the status menu oh did I forgot I hve a heaven defying thing that is-'INVENTORY'AND'RACE:DRAGON GOD(HIDDEN)

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
imryo

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYCOMEDYMARTIAL ARTSMULTIPLE LOVERSROMANCE SUBPLOTSCHOOL LIFEHORROR

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Rating
2.1/ 5.0
Followers
160
Views
111,747

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(9)

  • DryWaterRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    In all honesty, I enjoyed reading this fiction. No, not because of its content, or anything relating to it. In fact, I didn’t even really ‘read’ it. But it’s because reading this made me realize that at least I can write better than this. So thank you for motivating me and raising my confidence. For that, you can have 5 stars.
  • LikoPilioRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    I stumble this one after certain someone said this is the worst story in RR. After reading others that surely could be nominated for those case, it is surprising that I'm not disappointed with the atrocities of this so-called novel. I thought I would puke after the prologue, however I keep reading it through, perhaps I'm a closeted masochist, then?
    -have a 2.5 star pity from me :)
  • Dat_KarmaRoyal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    Having an OP as hell mc is fine and all. Please work on the formatting and punctuation of the story and be more descriptive? maybe
  • Dao LiRoyal Road
    ★ 1.0
    the chapters are way too short are more like quick darts of ideas lacking depth behind it leaves a unfulfillING taste
  • DrunkenDutchRoyal Road
    ★ 1.0
    Once again people start throwing around 5 stars in a review. Why? Only god knows. (maybe sarcasm ?)
    Leaving the review field empty or just shouting random stuff sounds totally legit.
    The story of monster evolution world is nothing new. The MC dies horribly and reincarnates in a fantasy world as an overpowered dragon. Its not super original, but as long the story is enjoyable that should not matter at all. But that is where things start going wrong.
    The chapters are short, like really really short. Even a grocery lists tend to be longer then this. The grammer could use alot of work. Alot of people (myself included) are not native english speakers so i do understand, however try to proofread your chapters before you post.Dont drag out words, for example:
    "WWWWWWHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAATTTT TTTTTHHHHEEEE SHIT." - Chapter one prologue.Your story isnt really fluid, i dont know how to explain it but it doesnt feel right. Alot of sentences feel like an info dump, have no depth and conversations do not feel like conversations at all. Ugh, just read chapter 2 and you will understand.Some chapters feel like chess, pawn to B4, queen to E5. Try to describe situations and give more details.
    The best example would be the merging of the death core. He just screams 3 times "painfull,painfull, PAINFULL" and toutches the "yes" button to merge. That is just lazy and bad writing. The format could use some work.The MC so far lacks character, he just does stuff and that's it.Hopefully these pointers can help you in your closed door cultivation.
  • GalaxyGladiousRoyal Road
    ★ 1.0
    you finally did it, a chapter where I had to scroll down to finish
  • JustyouraverageleecherRoyal Road
    ★ 0.5
    this story is a crapy imitation of “evolve “. The gramar is bad and overall story is a joke and example how not to write a story.there is no substance he just got almost every power whitout doing anything.in other novels authors at least try to make it look like their characters op abilities are gained from hard work or insights.
  • MythicalDiviRoyal Road
    ★ 0.5
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  • Raizen96Royal Road
    ★ 0.5
    Very little description is given at the start, all chapters are barely half a page long, grammar and punctuation are complete crap. I'm pretty sure this person doesn't really even know how to write a proper paragraph. There is really no character development at all and no real plot developments to push the novel. The story literally just jumps from one thing to the next and anything that does happen isn't really explained. I don't care if this guy's laptop is broken or not, he still shouldn't be writing a "novel" if it's gonna look like absolute crap. I've seen people write way better chapters on their phone so all in all,  I'm pretty sure this guy is just doing this to screw around with people and in all honesty anyone who calls this a novel is giving the so called author way too much credit because that's just how much this thing sucks.