Miraculous Spider Man

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Jarrin Wright was a nobody. He was a simple cog in the wheel. No he was not even a cog he was screw that fell out of the machine, and the machine kept on going like nothing has ever happened. Let just say that he felt like his life was meaningless. He had no friends, His parents were disappointed in in him and most importantly he thought he was a failure. The only light in Jarrin life was comic books, Like DC and Marvel. Ever since he was young he use to dream of being a hero in one of the stories he read. One day he gets that chance unfortunately  he dies. The gods take pity on young Wright  and transmigrate him into the  body of and alternate younger version of himself.  He soon realize he came to the DC universe but it is different from the one he knows. The major difference is that he gets bitten by a radioactive spider on a field trip to Oscop. You see where I am going with this. Jarrin decides that now that he has a second chance he is going to things differently he going to live his life to the fullest" I am going to do better.... I am going to be better.... I am going to be the Miraculous Spiderman."

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2019
Author
Blackninja63

Tags

ACTIONCOMEDYSCI-FIROMANCE SUBPLOTSCHOOL LIFEMALE LEADSECRET IDENTITY

Royal Road Stats

Rating
3.9/ 5.0
Followers
131
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42,779

Chapters(20 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

  • Nico CastroRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    i love the concpet just from the description i can tell this novel will go far first 5 chapters and im already hooked. Hope to more chapters releases soon😁
  • reading demonRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    I love you story you just need to fix the grammer or get a proof reader other than that it is a great storyI can't wait to read more
  • JazehiahRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    I want to like this novel. However, it is hard to read and hard to follow.
    Style:
    The author does not use quotation marks. It's like trying to read a script for a play. There is little in the way of descriptions. Most of the story is told through dialog, instead of narration. This would be fine, except I have no idea who half the people are, and the perspective bounces between characters. It's like reading a third person narrative in the first person. It doesn't work. At least it's consistent.
    Grammar:
    There is no punctuation a the end of dialog. It's improving, but this is obviously not the author's first language.
    Story:
    It's a good premise, it just feels like the author doesn't know how to tell it. The grammar and style are really holding it back. I feel like I can't really judge the story, because it's so hard to understand what's going on.
    Characters:
    They feel two-dimentional. Most of them are just a name and a gender. There hasn't been any development that I can see. I'm not very far in, but the fact that I can't tell who's who except by the dialog tags is pretty disappointing.
    Overall:
    Fix the grammar. Learn to use quotation marks. Stop bouncing between viewpoints and stick with a third person narrator. Doing that will raise the quality significantly.
  • LunerSoul997Royal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    I think this has very good potential; the concept is interesting, and the characters  are solid-ish. I have next to no problems with them.
    What I have a problem with is the way it is written.
    That being said, it annoys me. The way the diolouge is presented, in particular. Not to mention the constant grammatical errors and typos that tear me out of the story.
    At one point I wondered to myself "has this person ever read a book?"
    No work is perfect, grammatical errors are often unavoidable, and typos happen. But to this extent, I'm doubtful they even proofread. Maybe they're young or English isn't their first language, I don't know.
    And the dialogue presentation kills me inside every single time.
    Dont get me wrong, I'm not trying to hate on this. I'm sure many people find this enjoyable and entertaining.
    Its simply not for me, I suppose. Half the time it felt like I was reading someone's half-assed roleplay, not a story.
    all-in-all this has potential, but I found it infuriating to read.
  • DemonicRoyal Road
    ★★ 1.5
    Fismrst thing is the grammar is aweful and second the writer should go and read the spiderman comics to pull more inspiration this is a story that if and when it gets polished could actually amount to something
  • robo_dogRoyal Road
    ★ 1.0
    I don't know what NICO is smoking, and i don't know how he could injoy it as the grammar is very bad and that's a drag because it's such a good premise. The story as it is being writin' seems like it would be interesting if not for a couple things.
    ONE SPELLING
    The spelling is atrocious and really needs a proof reader. It’s obvious that this is not their first language but if you post something then you need to at the very least make it readable. I had to re-read multiple sections of this to understand what it’s saying from context and there are sections of the story that I am just guessing on as I can’t get context from it, it’s so unreadable. half star
    TWO CHARACTER
    Characters design is nonexistent as there’s no development what so ever and well, just read the first chapter and you can see how well the characters are, as there’s no personality making conversations very boring, stale, and monotone. half star
    THREE STORY
    As in there is none. There’s no transitions and the story’s jumping all over the place so you never can follow along. I can tell there is a direction that the story is heading so i'll give a star but it’s moving at a fast, forced pace. You need to build and grow the world as I don’t know what type of street they live on rich? Poor? Middle-class? Suburb? Urban? What in the world is his living conditions like? What’s his school like? What’s the city like? You need life in a world. So far, all its been is poor dialog small paragraphs in-between to get to dialog. And there can be the most random elements that are just not necessary at all major example of this is how all of a sudden there’s a Jordan Wright like why do we care at all about this random if he shows up later then explain it then. I get he’s a part of your story but come on don’t just come to my door take a duce and disappear while I’m trying to make sense of the mess you just made.
    I’ve wasted enough of my time. Long story short it’s a bad story, with bad characters, and bad spelling. Also