Milendrum world

Self-Published

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Description

World of magical creatures, gods, beasts, kings, and human with the unnatural ability. This is where the protagonist Arthur live. Follow his adventure in this world . the world of milendrum

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2018
Author
Dio Asd

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICTRAGEDYSUPERNATURALMARTIAL ARTSSTRONG LEADMALE LEADSTRATEGY

Royal Road Stats

Rating
2.7/ 5.0
Followers
16
Views
422

Chapters(1 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • DrunkenDutchRoyal Road
    ★★ 1.5
    You started the novel with a big but uninteresting infodump. It did not add anything to the story since it's so forgettable. Most readers would just skim it or skip it. Do not be hasty and let the MC explore the world. Show us how he interacts with the world and what he learns. This is how worldbuilding works and the main character will develop. Also worldbuilding by narrating pieces of text is generally bad. Just look at M. Night Shyamalan's avatar the last airbender.
    Another note is the way you write. So far it feels like a chess game. pawn to B4, queen to E5. While it is good that you describe everything that's happening, it's just a summary of events. How does the MC feel? How does he look at things? How does he experience the world? It would have been alot more interesting if you started from the MC's point of view.
    The story itself? Bland and boring