Men of the Moon
Self-Published
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Description
wrote this for my extension english test
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- HarbingerOfFrogs
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 80
Chapters(1 total)
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- RznRoyal Road★★★ 3.0The story does not make a lot of sense because it is separated in ideas from one another as our MC hides from the 'metal men'. There are a lot of awkward sentences, sentence fragments and odd constructions like 'overgrown supermarket shelves' which simply does not make any sense. While this goes to capture a feeling the writing is rough and focused on details instead of establishing something with clarity, a bunch of disconnected ideas and shifts keep it from laying out the desperation in a good way.