Melissa.ii 5
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Melissa.ii 5 (Read as Melissa Point 25)A girl who crosses dimensions everytime she dies, tries to find her purpose in life.From a fantasy world to another, she tries to find what is the reason she remembers everything that happened to her, but somehow, along the way, she loses her mind along the way....
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2016
- Author
- Scirno
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 6
- Views
- 983
Chapters(1 total)
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- RznRoyal Road★★★ 3.0The title of this is rather interesting, though I am not sure how natural that would be read by most people. The story here gets underway with a prologue that might as well be a chapter 1. It is not bad, but the prose has what I would call chronological and framing issues for the POV. What the narrator describes is often out of the logical order of things. This makes the prose really awkward to read. Other issues include grammar and tense issues such as 'beauty of the wrecked place' go to a type of logical confusion of ideas. With this fixed (along with the typos) it would make the opening much more reader friendly.