Master of Weapons

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In a land of 5 continent, a group of gods decides to have a battle, they chose a single Champion as representative, chosen from another world, now this is a story of one of those champions, how he will rise in power with allies at his side, and weapons to accompany him-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Hi, this is my first Fanfic, sorry for the random edits that might happend, so give me some feedbacks and rate my fiction. Chapter is all based on my mood and brain power, so chapters are posted on random intervals, lastly, this is just my hobby, so don't bother me too much. that's all I have to say, bye.You can read my fiction here too: http://forum.novelupdates.com/threads/master-of-weapons.3217/

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Ryubii

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 335
Views: 126,339

Chapters(24 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

SoulflyerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
short but pleasant to read , keep up the good work, you've got a new fan.
kris909Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I like the story though I have a question will he be able to use elemental magic or something like that?... Keep up the good work.
Donthebest22Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Hi all
Ok first of This is a good story do continue and keep writing, Now for the hard part which i don't want to do
The style of the story is simple but as i have said alot of time before that's good we readers like simple and that's ok the style is simple reincarnation and op mc but other than that simple, but what is different is that it's 1 a different author 2 different world and it might include more worlds, who knows at the moment.
Now this is the harsh part your story is mediocre at best although it has unique elements which i love from the skills to the character but that's it all you needed to do was add some more to the world make it epic show the readers why this world is great, how you do that is up to you i can only say is add to the setting describe the place the mc is in.
Now i get that this is a different world but some readers won't like how your mc is 1 year old you have good time skips and it's placed well but that's it you have short chapters filled with nothing that interesting you need cliffhangers to make the readers want more and by doing that attract more readers, now as i can see this is just the start and you need to kepp writing to improve, but what i fear is that one you maybe rushing this a little but i get the time skips and you don't want to see him reading all that books, but finding out what he read would help
Now for grammar it needs work fist with your sentence placing make it look nice but other than that it's readable just some minor mistakes here and there.
Now for characters your mc we will learn alot about as the story progresses but, your side characters need development and your first harem member is not developed really that was so predictable make her more than a shell i don't know how do it i just want you do develop the characters more like his family needs development i know nothing of the mother and farther other than all he did was MARRY ME! and that's it she said yes i mean what... how...
so ask more questions if
dwoolfyRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The best way to describe this story is as a low quality xania/wuxia knockoff. In comparison to other works on RR is is a little better than average, but that does by no means make the story good.
Style: Standard Xania/Wuxia world type utilizing the reincarnation archetype. Boy dies. Boy is offered reincarnation. Boy is given 3 unique gifts along with keeping his memories so that he can act as a deity’s champion. The way that the story is presented is highly simplified without much depth. This includes chapter length which in reality does not matter as long as the author can provide a quality story within those short chapters.
Story: The story itself seems to be a bit above average on this site as well. Nothing outstanding and nothing that kills the story for me either. When I first saw this story I was thinking that it would be similar to the ‘Master of Learning’ story. Fortunately this author was able to avoid the major pitfalls that that caused that story to be so pathetic. This is not a travelogue though it could easily turn into one. There is dialog that adds to the story.
Grammar: The grammar here in this work is at best average when I compare it to the translated wuxia/xania novels when all editing is skipped and the translation is done by someone who has English as a 3rd language and their 2nd language is the language of origin for the story. There are definite problems here that could easily be resolved by anyone that is competent in the English language spending a few minutes reading through the chapters and correcting most of the errors.
Character: So far the characters are the best part of the story. Rather interesting but not outstanding.
Overall: This piece is a poor knockoff of the popular translated novels that are becoming prevalent.
Recommendations to the author: Go back through the chapters and expand them, providing more depth to the story. Afterwards go through and edit the story fixing the many errors that you find. Find your