Margrave's Divinity

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2020

Author

Endemus

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Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• MooshieDRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  what a great book!  Recurring mature themes (not the x-rated kind, but rather the not-10year-old-comic kind) and conflicts with a healthy dose of light hearted-ness, super action, intrigue, and a bit of system mixed in.
  Very much enjoying!
• johns276Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Found this story pretty interesting.  One of the few which I have binge-read.  Hope to see it completed.
• RationalMindRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Continue the good work. And please don't drop it like many others on this site.
• EldarZecoreRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  The start of this story is very similar to a manga called Solo Leveling, which was exactly what I had been looking for when I found this story. I absolutely love the amount of world building and the authors ability to weave it into conversations and the MC's thoughts without needing large exposition dumps. I am very happy to say that as this story continues on its depth does so as well.
  At the same time, I fully believe that Endemus can do more with his universe and will do so as time goes on. I can't wait to see more of the adventure that turns Lyle from a reletive unknown, into the person we heard being talked about in the Prologue.
• Jetzer2232Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I did say earlier on that I would put forward my issues with the story so here they are:
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  The role of the growth sword is obscure and forgotten. Lyle is apparently a 'magic swordsman' yet even the story has recognised that he never manages to actually use the growth sword because of the fact that he blasts all his enemies away with ranged magic.
  His magic mastery is too easy. Imagine being in a world where only single elemental acquisition is possible, yet Lyle gets the superpower to control all 4 elements with the degree of mastery high enough to not only take down a corrupted (who clearly has more experience than him, albeit a weaker power) but also restrain him all without losing control.
  The philosophical parts of the elements were coolio and all, but the level of control in only 1 elements already makes him superior to a majority of other Empowered.
  This is more of a warning than a particular issue with the story, but I highly recommend you address and better plan the power creep. Lyle is the only person who can level up as he does. He even has higher than normal stats to start off with. You should think about how you will represent his growth and ability to overcome the reasonably powerful enemies through his own growth (whether it's through pure power or smarts) without making it into the next Dragon Ball Z level of bullshit.
  There's now way to say this any other way, but I like your 2nd part of the story way better than the first part. The LitRPG aspects of the story are lacking compared to the pure tension that comes from just having normal drama. I am not opposed to the LitRPG aspects of any story, compared to what I have seen in the later parts of the story, it seems that it would be much better if the system never existed because every single stat and such seems to translate into an easy way out of a bad situation. I enjoyed it when he battled the tentacle monster, because he had to overcome the battle but then just adding random stats to
• mad-nessRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Pretty well written, interesting world building.
  Has some 'flaws' but I don't know if those are just because it is incomplete (some of these stories really take quite a few chapters to get full immersion) or if they are a sign of ongoing issues.
  Not even really sure how to criticize it but it lack that certain something that grabs the reader that the very best stories have.
• MistelteinnRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  I'm not quite sure how to describe it, but to me Lyle feels like a layabout, the entire thing reads like much ado about nothing. He went there did this, then went over there and did that.
  There's no hook, no excitement of going into a dungeon and surviving by the skin of your teeth or simply just overwhelming everything. All I got was, he went into this labyrinth, killed a bunch, got some trinkets. Done.
  It didn't FEEL like he put his life on the line. Didn't FEEL like there were consequences for failing.
  His entire personality feels like reactive rather than proactive, reading about him keeps making me feel like "CMON, Do MORE, stop faffing about, you have freaking powers! figure them out, experiment! Go crazy!" but no, he just goes about his day as if his entire life hadn't been turned around by gaining powers.
  Some guy comes up and beats your ass, probably stealing your girl and you're like, eh, I'll just send her an email? Like what? That's not the reaction of someone in a relationship.
  As an adult, you'd think he'd understand the value of money. He needs money for his sisters college and I assume to give his mother a better life, but nooooooooooooooo......
  Let me settle for this 4 mil and just sell away this rare artifact, becuase reasons.
  I mean if he needs money, why is he not bargaining for more? If he is trying to impress Morgan, why do you not impress this upon the readers?
  That money could been used to do so much? you could've bought new gear, bought gifts for your family, funded Abes inventions, bought a space ring that could store all your valuable shiny drops people would kill you for, hired someone to investigate Emily and the guy who probably cucked you.
  If not that a favour from an S ranker would've been nice.
  But No. Because REASONS. I just don't get it.
  In other words, his character feels bland and not too interesting, and most events reads like dry chicken. Add on some personal gripes and it's not to my taste, but the grammar is fine, plot seems
• RetricRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Got through act 1.
  Story is largely coherent and setting while extremely derivative is described well enough to get the idea across.  Effectively one dimensional characters are generally consistent though motives are seemingly random.
  Reasonable entertainment, but shows the main pitfalls of litRPG coupled with common fantasy issues.  Special snowflake MC with a tragic though mostly offscreen backstory deals with powerful character as exposition dump, minimal choice quests, and seemingly random actions and power ups.  Stats go into excessive detail, but don’t actually alter much as fights are plot based and abilities freeform in cost and utility.
  Foreshadowing is used as a blunt instrument to the readers removing  any hint of tension.  Most critically almost nothing would have changed if the MC had simply stayed at his dead end job through the entire story,  seemingly only helping a single family and powering up one person accidentally.
• EltreborRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  I had fun reading the first 20 or so chapters, but then all the little things in the story that annoyed me made it so I had no desire in continuing to read the story.
  Story is obviously their take on the story of the Manhwa/Webnovel Solo Leveling, and while I saw a review saying that this story was better, I would have to disagree. The story lacks focus and meanders about with no real goal in mind. Main character gets ridiculous items for doing the simplest of tasks just so he can have cool stuff and become rich, completely ridiculous. The main character is gaining power way too quickly and never tests what he can actually do.
  Style sometimes was enjoyable, but the fight scenes could be better written and pacing improved.
  Grammar was fine as far as I could tell, wasn't really looking too hard.
  Characters are dull and lack common sense. The main character gets a system where he levels up and can add to his attributes, he doesn't take the time to think about how he should apply the points and just spur of the moment applies them, short sighted, but not unforgiveable. What I can't forgive is the logic of him nearly dying in a labyrinth, and then deciding to go back in without any second thoughts for no reason at all. There is no driving force behind him getting stronger. The reason he entered the portal where he got his super powers is because he was going to kill himself so why not go into this never before seen portal. For a quick second it looked like that he would be working to make money for his family, he then gets a ton of super items from a dungeon and sells one for millions. The main character is told that you can empower yourself with mana and then never attempts it or trains with it until he is in a life or death situation. Main character was one dimensional and the side characters were not any better.
  Overall it was an okay read, but nothing special.
• GrekerenRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  read until ch.37
  Sorry authorman but the story is boring and the characters are shallow. The premise of the story is interesting and the worldbuilding is ok, but that's about it.
  To really grip an audience your characters got to feel somewhat real, it's harsh to say it but yours almost feel computer generated. Even a boring story can go along with great characters and interactions between them.
  I gave it 2 stars since the grammar is good, the story is readable and there not any contradictions in the story as I can see.