Mana

Self-Published

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Description

Centuries ago, the ancient hero Kai figured out how to extract the abilities of the gods into tiny marbles called Mana. During his final battle with the gods, the hero Kai used his abilities to disperse hundreds of these marbles through out the lands.At the turn of the new century, the lives of the people of the land changed due these monstrous creatures called Holos that would cause chaos and destruction at its path. In this century a new breed of warriors called adventurers have emerged to deal with the Holos that would cause disorder everywhere.In a town called Pea, north of the boarder of The Kingdom Akau, a boy by the name of Makani begins his life as an adventurer and hopes to one day become "" A well known adventurer"". But little did he know that one day he would become more than what he hopes to be.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: darkjoker64

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 49
Views: 22,923

Chapters(15 total)

Reviews

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Community Reviews(6)

GIFHokageRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I like the idea of the gaining superpowers through these stones called Mana. Character quickly but slowly builds up. Lots of sad stuff with some fighting and slaying of monsters called “Holos”. The story started fast now its going in a pace with various characters that will most likely be part of one big story. Keep at it!
I3lueRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Personally I like it because of the concept. I love the Map! But it could be better if its more descriptive. I'm also curious what kind of Manas the MC will be getting in the futureLooking forward for more!
darkjoker64Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Read please and comment. Maybe make a review?
darksulikRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
good so far. Can't wait to see more chapters hope this story doesn't get dropped
CreeperTheReaperRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I have seen plenty of similar stories in the past unfortunately I have never seen one get completed. A pity these are my favorite type. As of right now I will rate this four stars due to three chapters being out. I actually see no issues whatsoever with this novel other then lack of chapters. On a bright nlte this type of story is my favorite even more so due to its rarity. If any of you are like me you will throughly enjoy it. Keep up the good work.
ClearMadnessRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Alright let’s start. The author obviously has a lot of good ideas but isn’t a skilled writer. The setting is interesting and has the potential for some depth, but it’s hard to be sure considering how little has been written so far. The good news is that the author just needs practice and good feedback to make his writing shine, and I hope this review is helpful in that regard.
There are typos, improper tense, run on sentences, and misspellings. I left a comment with a lot of examples and bits of advice on the first chapter. I strongly suggest they use a program like Grammerly or Microsoft Word to edit their work before posting it. On top of that they need to practice how to use a comma to break up sentences.
Also, the author has the bad habit of using the same word over and over again. Maybe they shouldn’t do that because maybe it would be a bad thing. <— sub in a perhaps or something.
Another issue I had was the actions of the characters feel random and contrived. The author should work on making sure their actions are explained in a reasonable way and not just stated. For instance if an old lady wants to give away one of the most valuable items in the world to a total stranger the author needs to better explain why she choose to do that.
Anyway, I hope this review is very helpful and aids the author in unlocking their potential. <— see what I did there?
https://www.grammarly.com/