Malediction: Damned Reincarnate

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An archdemon cut a deal with a crazed man.The Doctrine of Chaos whispers secrets to him offering glimpses of untapped potential.Oh the realm hear thee, for a 10000 year long storm is upon you. The man is not one but many and each one more ludicrous. I beseech you, Prepare.....

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Kichu

Tags

SATIREFANTASYSUPERNATURALPSYCHOLOGICALMALE LEADPORTAL FANTASY / ISEKAIREINCARNATIONHIGH FANTASYVILLAINOUS LEAD

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3.8/ 5.0
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193

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  • burningGroundRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    The dialogue feel jarring and everything by the "woman veiled in revealing clothes" felt hastily put together, not to mention the constant all-caps makes it seem that the character is yelling (hell, she might not even be), but it detracts from the immersion. Maybe if the author wanted to depict a resounding voice, maybe italics or bolded script might be a better way to forgo that.
    I'll elaborate more on the dialogue's problem, it feels like that they have the personality of a bot designed to give the protagonist a fetch quest. The woman might be alluring externally, but certainly not the way she conducts herself lol.
    Then there's also a lot of these silent awkward moments after the abrupt exchange (where they keep cutting each others) like:
    "WOULDN'T YOU LIKE TO BE WITH YOUR WIFE.. OOH I BELIEVE YOU HAD 3 DAUGHTERS TOO AN I CA-"
    [...]
    "I CAN GIVE YOU A SECOND CHANCE, I WILL RESET TIME ABOUT AROUND THE TIME OF YOUR 3RD DAUGHTER'S BIRTH AND EVEN SET YOU BACK TO YOUR SANER VERSION BUT IN EXCHANCE YOU WILL HAVE TO BE MY CHAOS AGENT IN ANOTHER WORLD FOR 10000 YEARS FIRST."
    "Deal, but ill kill you if you break your promise" he let go of her and sat back on the floor again.
    They remained silent for an ephemeral time. Eyes met akin to predators gauging to determine which one of them is prey. After the archdemon had her fun and she cut the tension herself.
    "HUMAN RATHOD"
    That will give you a rough idea of the writing style... which makes the situation more comedic than serious with how awkward it is depicted.