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Number one expert in the Devata realm was on his end of life span. He was unwilling to hand over his sect to his ungrateful disciples. He decided to burn all his power and sect's resources to create a microchip that was designed to help him find and create a successor.

He named the system as -Gentleman's system

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BullerRoyal Road

★★★★ 4.0

I understand that the author wants to tell a story, I understand that the premise of the story seemed pretty fun, and I understand that it might even turn into something good later on. But now? I gotta say that the grammar makes it really hard to read for me. As I showed in the title as an example, mistyping commas is not the most uncommon occurrence. Some might be able to ignore that but I just can't. It was too distracting to even get a good reading on the MC. Emotions weren't as well shown as I would've liked it to.
4/5 for now. Can change later on.

Benjamin ConnorRoyal Road

★★★★ 3.5

Now, hear me out. These Progression stories are hard to pull off right.
I don't blame anybody for that fact, there's lots of promise here, but also problems
Grammar. I too have suffered from bad Grammer and actively use programs to help me edit my works. But Dang Son, You have a lot of work left in that regard. And I realized you published this book in under a week, Impressive work really, But take this next week or so to Iron out these wrinkles, Really lean on'em.
Also, your Prelude is a Philosophy debate, Not cool dude. Brings down the mood for the entire book. Also, everybody talks like their giving a speech in a Mandarin Court. What's going on there?
I will applaud you for the effort of the Redemption Arc. It's good to see, but I'm sensing a disconnect between Reward and Punishment here, At least in the first chapters. Kinda has this sense of "Okay, how does he screw up?" or "Is this a Trick?"
That makes sense for somebody starting, but I feel it's not used right. I don't know, The Balance is off somewhere and the Rewards started feeling fake. I'm sure you'll spot it once you look for it.
Were All about Self Improvement here, Right?
Look, You got a good thing here, But, the Execution leaves much to be desired. These should be mostly internal drama, personal trials are difficult, and I feel that doesn't get across.
After that, well. I'm just confused as to what these DEVATA clans are supposed to be. Your Story is about Morals and Finding Virtue, and these guys are running around saying "Oh, It doesn't MAtter" and "Same side of a Coin" such. I know you set them up as the antagonists, but It sends mixed Signals throughout the rest of the piece.
Okay, I think that's everything. That I could find in under 10 chapters. You got your work cut out for you buddy. I'll check back eventually to see what changes, take your time.

Making of a Gentleman

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