Magical Cosmic

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Status

Hiatus

Year

2025

Author

CherShootX

• Another New Story!
  Jun 22, 2025

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Avery LightRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Okay first off, forgive my grammar.
  If you are wondering should you read this? Yes. Keep up the good work author!
  Style: Nothing to nitpick here. Smooth.
  Story: The Story is the driving force of this fiction, start in space but soon in fantasy world, some info about the tech that shows the author didn't just make things up and have done some research is a plus point. It's immersive too, give you the feeling of wanting to click the next chapter button for most chapters.
  Grammar: I'm not one to talk because my grammar is bad myself but, in my humble opinion, this is the weakest part of the story, but don't get me wrong, it's great and easy to understand. I just sometimes noticed a few not quite fitting choices of words and there's over the top description like the Chinese novels. It may be just me but sometimes it breaks the immersion, like when you were driving your car in a straight line and met a speed bump.
  Character: The earlier chapters have chars doing questionable actions, like they were a bit scripted? In my opinion the MC also a bit jumping the gun with his action in the early chapters. Still, it remains exciting and Victor (MC) was easy to relate with.
  Review until chapter 18
• SigurdRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Style: 4,5
  The paragraph and dialogue structures are overall good. Someone may find issues with the use of square brackets for the lines spoken by an AI, but I would never call it a flaw. It's style, nothing more to add.
  Grammar: 2,5
  This story begins with a wrong sentence. Then, the following ones all contain at least one mistake each. As a non-English speaker myself, I understand that the urge of writing sometimes can be a bit overwhelming and we might just want to do it, without a care for grammar and other boring aspects. Still, as much as it hurts me to give a low score, this must be a honest review. Tenses shifting randomly from present to past, a general negligence in the structure of sentences, misused punctuation and a constellation of typos made this read harder than I imagined, with my eyes rolling at least once per paragraph. It's not the worst I've seen by far, but needs a lot of improvement.
  Story: 4,5
  The setting is promising so far. Without spoiling anything, the story seems to move on at a steady pace, without cutting any corner, it's dynamic and entertaining enough to keep the reader invested and doesn't look improvised. Writing a sci-fi world (even if it has fantasy elements) is never easy, and I can get the feeling that the author did a good amount of research before starting this project. Good!
  Characters: 4,5
  I found no major issues with the characters. The interactions between Victor and his AI companions (and others who come out later and who I won't spoil) are believable and interesting. There are also occasional shifts in perspective that work well and deepen our knowledge about the protagonists.
  Overall: 4
  This is one of those stories which I can't punish with an overly strict rating because of its passion. The potential is there, and with some time and effort it might even become a success, especially given the level of the competition here on this website. Still, please, your grammar!
  A dubious yes, for me, but still a yes. Read it, bear
• Arashi ZarosRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  (old review at 11/10)
  although I not a review expert, but I still feel the character a bit 2D for some reason ?, and the early chapter could be a bit info dump, but at least it not overdone and he do spread the info for later moment when it needed though, beside gotta deal with those stuff before you have more wiggle room to write there
  the author also do research stuff a bit so at least it quite realistic somewhat.
  There are not much chapter right now so I will review again later, oh and the fantasy stuff will begin at chapter 8 (yes, I read the early on in author discord)
  Edit at 16/11/2019: After the author have learn and improve more, he have gone back to rewrite the old chapter, so it less info dump and better grammar/typos now, include the problem with past tense and present tense thing, and thing become to be more better after chapter 22, especially chapter 24~25, where you get a new character with interesting quirk there, and kingdom building start at chapter 28 or 29
  (slight spoiler hint: there are reason why other call him 'Mr. Brown')
  Beside he also notice some problem with the 'china exaggerate' writing style/word like 'cough up mouthful of blood', or the 'I will take a hundred time of punishment for shaming you' while they only slightly offend other guy thing, and are try to find other better replacement for the word there, there are still some 'china' part here and there but it not as bad, hope some of you guy help point out and find a good replacement for him here since he get some bad writing habit by reading xianxia novel a lot .
  Here is the example of 'china' way and the replacement (not all replacement is long):
  + 'He cough up a mouthful of blood'
  + 'I noticed that Brown’s mouth was leaking blood, as that could be seen spreading on his brown glove'
• BastiVERoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  So far it's a great start, and a very interesting universe that we've seen but there are so many grammatical mistakes it gets hard to understand what the author is meaning at times. It might do well do get a second eye on the chapters to suss out these issues.
• Waffle(est)Royal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  A fresh (compared to usual at least) take on xianxia mixing it up with some sci-fi themes. A step away from "lets push the fast forward button until something interesting happens 200 years later" (lets hope this is still true 50 chapters from now!).
  The story isn't the best ever but the fresh theme and experimentation with the melding keeps it fresh and engaging for now.
  For grammar I see that some previous reviews have had quite a few things to say. Reading now, however, it is clear that huge revisions and polishings have taken place resulting in quite a pleasant reading experience. (This has been explicitly mentioned, good job!)
  At this point the weakest point in the story is definitely the characters, most specifically the villains. This is one area where the story has been stuck to xianxia tropes with grade AAA superglue. In short, at any point in time (to chapter 54 which is current) the main antagonist is always portrayed as a cartoonishly evil entity: Greed, sadism, violence, incompetence, insatiable lust (both literally and for blood), taking imagined offences to unreasonable extremes.. . A character whose all personality sliders where rammes straight off the "bad" end and into the next dimension is not an engaging or interesting opponent, it is a repetitive and tired meme, "oh, yet another unreasonably homicidal inexplicably overpowered person who could not have conceivably attained that power with a personality that bad (who would help or have loyalty to such a person? 5 of them???), just the usual then". Just once.. I would love to read a cultivation story where some of the competition actually acts in a not-insane manner.
  In short: Do give it a try, its already quite engaging and there is strong evidence of quality improving over time as well so I have high hopes going forward!
• WinterwispRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  This review is relevant up to chapter 43.
  This story is a fine meld of sci-fi and fantasy, taking elements of them both and making a good run of it. There's character in this work, and it is decently put together. There are, however, also issues - of which the author is aware, and actively working on. As a work-in-progress this is a fine story that shows potential.
  Style: I will not spend too much time on this. Consistent narrators in their given perspective, and agency in character actions are my main gripes here. Except for these, stylistic decisions are fine.
  Grammar: While there are no issues with spelling; general syntax and word choices needs more work. Keeping the past tense in both narration and direct speech is also an issue. It is nowhere near terrible, but it takes away from immersion and makes reading a chore.
  Story: As mentioned, this is where the potential of the story shines. The premise is interesting, the play on science is mostly believable, and there is a steady build over the initial chapters. I fear the author may be rushing a little in later chapters, perhaps due to requests from the audience.
  Character: Here, again, there's potential, but in this case it is especially the antagonists that drags the story down a bit. While the MC is generally fleshed out neatly, and the side-characters are distinct and consistent, the antagonists who have appeared at this stage all feels cut from the same cloth. Writing compelling antagonists is a hard but rewarding art that sometimes needs more attention than main- and side characters.
  Overall: It is always easier to be harsh and demanding than to find the kernel of potential lying underneath. The issues I have mentioned above are easily overcome with more scrutiny and hard work, and with these resolved there's a pretty good story here. Have confidence, have patience, and keep up the good work!
• WildstaraRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  First few paragraphs I read had major misuse of grammar. The story seemed promising but jeez I can't read this.😢
• MnemonicRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  A Good story from an author with imagination. The style and grammar is annoying....  Pls author dont be discouraged... improve!! Will read later if improved.
• PrimalShadowRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  NOTE: This review applies to the early chapters, when the MC is in their original universe.
  I like my science fiction to have at least a thin vineer of "science" over the "fiction" - and that is something this story definitely fails at.
  There are many examples, but here is the one that inspired me to write this review:
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  Universal Measurement Device…. It was a device that can precisely measure anything, including a lifeform’s power or fitness level and even something that couldn’t be measured by any other advanced measurement.
  I grabbed the package and opened it, revealing a device that looked like a speed gun.
  One reason why I bought this was that it can almost scan anything that other scanners couldn’t afford. It’s true that my smart helmet is also capable to measure things in general, but this thing is made with a unique material that can detect and measure anything.
  We have here a device that can "measure everything" because it is made of a "unique material". And as seen further on, this device is used to measure the power levels of various life forms. All of which is something that would be perfectly reasonable in a LitRPG or a fantasy story of some kind - such worlds often work based off of conceptual laws, so it is entirely reasonable to have an item with the property of being able to measure things, and for that property to simultaneously cover mundane measurement as well as the measurement of "power levels". But in science fiction it is presumed that the world runs on physics, and not conceptual bullshit.
  I don't know how the rest of the story pans out, but given that the description mentions technology playing a major role in things later on, I'm not optimistic.
• user24 killRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  The MC and othe supporting character is so stupid.
  You have 80yo merchant who acts like a dog that was given a treat, i mean come on do you have to act like you realy realy want to buy what his selling?
  Then theirs  the contract, its like asking your local drugdealer for a receipt
  "Junkie: brah its not like i dont trust you or something but i need a receipt, we can just change the name to high class sugar."
  "Drugdealer: sure sure its not like this is illegal and we could get in alot of trouble."
  The other one is the "MANAGER OF A  BIG COMPANIES WHICH OWNED THE BLUE MOON STATION" the author seriously thinks that the manager would risk his career over something so little like that.