Lucifer Dark the summoned fallen angel

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Description

Lucifer Dark is a kid who everybody stays away from.One day he and his class are summoned to another world to defeat the demon lord.Everybody got cheats exept our Lucifer.But the king let him join the heroes anyway because he could fight.On one mission he was betrayed and left half-dead. He sweared he will get his revenge no matter what.This fiction includes:foul language,gore and sex.This is my first time writing and english isn't my first language.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Samuraiesko

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Rating: 3.5/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

Cally LloydRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
id love if there was more. a great story love the charectersXD
DeenbaysidRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story is amazing and creatives *Thumbs Up*
DemizeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Im gonna be completely honest here.
First: this is way too similar to Arifureta, and Forsaken hero Light novels with some little but refreshing changes gotta tell you it felt great for the Mc to be a hidden "dragon"
Second: the story feels kinda rushed due to the lack of details, and lack of expressions. The dialogue between people feels way too fast and emotionless...
Third and last:
GRAMMAR well what can i say, its not your main language but there are some mistakes that are way too big like "stapped" i can tell you wanted to say "stabbed" but thats my guess, anyway this can be fixed by Pr.
With all said i hope you wont get negatively affected by this review for that is not its objective, also as i said this story change is refreshing from the "travel other world>underpowered Mc>betrayal>sudden raise of power" route as this mc WAS not op with skills but he had the experience to back him.
kay.lensonRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
well to put it simply this story is fast forward version of arifureta + epic tale of the forsaken hero...
PikachuRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Seems to be off to an interesting start, and the cliffhanger just reeks of foreshadowing.
meddler88Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
This a direct quote from the story and shows how direct and choppy the story is written.
"I decided to go in town and have a lunch. I ordered a steak and wine. My food arrives, I eat it and go to the adventurers guild."
The whole story is written this way unfortunately. The author needs to add a little detail to make the story flow correctly and not so choppily. An example with what i judge to be with minimal details:
After leaving the Inn i decided to grab some lunch from a local restaurant before heading to the guild. Browsing the menu i chose to have a steak and mashed potatoes with red wine to drink. Taking my time I enjoy the delicious food thinking about future plans, then pay my bill and head out to the guild.
Overall the story is good but i often find myself frustrated with how little details there are.
AVLRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I would had scored it 4 if you wouldn't had added a harem girl every 2 to 4 chapters.After what happened to the MC he was supossed to be Darker,I mean a demon lord who is good?
I can understand the first girl and barely endured the twins,but now that dragon half and human half is joinin and the MC just says,Fuck this.
If he was trained by his father,he probably trained him in the emotional way.
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There is almost no depth.I really am shocked how this novel is in top 20.There are many other better novels which should enter instead of this.
I now just read this novel to see how it ends.
hunterxsamuraiRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Just mc is too fast get orgy harem and harem mc girl is like first sight loves
ddamyonRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
The characters have no depht whatsoever. As a reader you want to experience the characters fully, feel their emotions and breaht with them the air of adnventure. The characters in this story are devoid of said emotions and the story is like a dialogue or a theatre play. The romantic aspect is a bit (strongly) forced. they what, only know each other for a few weeks and then bamm love? a bit cliché but ok... But the point where i couldn`t read anymore was the moment where she said:
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"Because I always wanted to be a maid. I know, a noble wants to be a maid. Weird, right?"
DUDE! THIS is the killer. at least make it like she was a slave bound with magic or something.
I recommend that you do the following:
1. share the thoughts of various characters
2. less dialogues, more actions ( describe their facial expression, try to convey actions without an adjective "Lucifers eyes darkend and pierced Subarus soul fiercer then the coldest winds of hell ",instead of "he is angry"
3. take your time with the story, describe a little bit more about the world, the atmosphere, dont just rush the story
4. kill this sorry excuse of a romance, or change it to be less descriptive with the sex scenes and more emotional. sometimes less words allow for more imagination from the reader, but phrases like: he pierced her hymnen...make it awkward to read
RalphieWRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Nice concept, Like all the other novels with a misunderstood and betrayed MC that takes revenge.
but it is so badly executed that you're better off reading another story that has the exact same storyline.
SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..SPOILERS..
MC has maid, Loves her, goes to dungeon that has 50 floors, kills boss and get's betrayed by "Hero", get's ressurected as a demon, going to adventurers guild and get's stronger.. and all this is what? 5 chapters? and the chapter's aren't even long. Felt like i read a novel written by a 5 year old high on speed.