Lorian Ellins [Dropped]

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Description

Lorian found himself in the medieval European style world, thinking he went back in time.

However, upon inquiring, he realized history, customs and as such were different.

This was a whole new world he knew nothing about. A place where powerful were respected and feared, a place where monsters and different races existed.

After a lucky encounter, Lorian manages to secure a job, home and survival.

However, the world is large and ready to be explored. Lorian won't be lost in mediocrity. This is his destiny.

Nonetheless, everyone starts at a low point in life.

Fast growth and OPness seemed impossible even with the help of the system.

, Life is neither a game nor a bunch of numbers. It's far more complex and unpredictable. We don't know where we stand in the future, or is there even future prepared for us? I always thought that overused motto in wuxia novels, '' I want to control my destiny '' was cliche and we had less control over our lives as they are dictated by many other factors. This world taught me otherwise, thus this place shall be my new beginning. ''

PS: The cover is not mine. It was randomly found on the internet.

The cover was edited by Nefarious.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/20337/the-pale-orphan- Link to his fiction

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: dima bajadze

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
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GinzoRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The author does a fantastic job of balancing the system with the fantasy world in which the story takes place. I am personally enjoying the fact that there are no specific atrributes listed such as strenght agility etc. It makes for a more immersive read rather than crunching numbers that become practically useless towards the end of the story. Instead the focus stays on the skills and the skill levels gained with the general exp distributed towards the physical body itself to strengthen it. I also like the fact that level doesn't dictate everything in this story, the actual skills and techniques with tactics make a big difference.
Overall the character development could use a bit of work, but I can see it getting better with every chapter so I won't harp on about it. instead I would like to caution the author and tell him/her to slow down in progression if you can. You have a great pace so far, and I would love for you to maintain it, perhaps increase the exp required to levle up or nerf the exp gained from killing samem onsters at a higher level later on.
Overall, a great read and I personally can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
Cheers!
hybridsteeleRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Please use quotation marks in your writing. Its not even remotely difficult to add them into your style of writing. They would also enhance the quality of your work since you can then use hyphens in the proper manner. Besides that you should try and add flavour to your work, it leaves a bland taste especially after trying to read conversations in hyphens. Also with the language you are using it is obvious that you can use proper grammar.