Lord of The Heavenly Villa

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Description

This is a story about a journey of a young adventurer, Acma Heart who travels across the world. Born in an age of space exploration and advanced science and technology, he was always dreaming to travel across dimensions and meet with their citizens. Luckily, his dream has finally come true. Due to a failed experiment that was supposed to open a portal to another dimension, the barrier between the dimensions shattered and a process of merging between worlds of different dimensions, started. An experiment that was supposed to be a beginning of an illustrious era, was marked as an era of human beings annihilation. Now, human beings have to fight for their own survival against mythical creatures,devils, demons, undeads and numerous other unknown creatures or they will go extinct. But to our young adventurer, this events are a great opportunity to fulfil his childhood dream. Watch him forge his way to become a new legend.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: abuatiah

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Rating: 3.6/ 5.0
Followers: 479
Views: 447,907

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Community Reviews(7)

lorenzo86Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This fiction is a joy to read , although it jut started they already plenty of action and intrigue . Hope that this fiction is regurly updated . A recommend reading this original fiction
gandhi687Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
good story ,keep it on.
the story plot is good with no loop holes yet.
keep it up it will end up in a good novel
the story has a good future
cant wait for ...........................................more....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
so do keep on writing
DragochaosRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story is unique although the MC is way to over powered the story has a lot of potential. A suggestion is that you limit the lvls ie if the monster kill is over 100 lvls then MC give him 20 lvls or something if you keep it up he will reach godly op to soon
JknottRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
MC starts off way to OP. I get the his mother experimented on him and such, but to have the OP armor os to much. Also you need an editor i dont see any spelling errors but your sentence sturtcure needs work, missing words, or the flow of the sentence needs to be changed up. At least 1 semtence out of every paragraph could use help.
RabenFutterRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The story follows the classic "hero gets stronger" setting the problem is that the hero is already extremly op and we watch as he gets stronger mostly by luck. There is no pressure, tension, no real choice or bigger consequence, the hero mostly is figthing some randome mobs and we all know that he wins anyway.
Also the mc is to perfect in a sense that he always makes the rigth choice without reason ergo he is lucky which make him loook stupid and the scripted.
dwoolfyRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
First off, I enjoy reading about OP characters and their adventures. This really would not qualify as that sort of thing. OP character – yes, adventure – not really.
You start off with a main character with all the benefits of extreme training to make your initial character OP. That was actually OK, but then we go and have xania/wuxia type luck where things just fall into place one after another to give him one OP ability after another, each being more OP than the last. Again I do not really find fault with that. It really becomes absurd when he gains deity skills at L10.
Style: Nothing really wrong with how the story is told or even the general concept but nothing stands out either.
Story: The story is somewhat low quality but it is also rather fun to read which makes up for some of the flaws.
Grammar: Word usage, while not the worst that I have seen here at RR, it is really bad. It has improved a bit from the first chapter, but not by enough to say the author is getting better. This story could really use the help of a proofreader/editor as long as there is one that is willing to spend the time on this fairly low quality piece of work.
Characters: 27 chapters in and there is really only one character who is the standard O-OP character that is seen commonly here at RR. We are starting to be introduced to some side characters and possibly seeing some decent humor, but not enough to say that the characters are more than average.
Overall: This story can use a lot of work. The basic concept of worlds merging and even taking a game type system and applying that system to the resulting merged world actually is quite good. I have seen similar setups here at RR, some good some bad. This one is average at best.
Good luck to the author and I hope that you get some good feedback from your readers and you take that feedback to heart in helping you to improve your story.
SedactiveRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
So my title kinda already tells what i find about this novel, the author wants to portray some heroic old school hunter/karate kid raised in te mountains vibe but i just dont feel it.
The storys starts with the kiddo saying he has always wished for adventure and hopes that the experiment that is about to start will give him that, as soon as it starts badaDOBOOOM SHIT HAPPENS.
For some reason the MC gos rambo style explaining he needs to be prepared for the worst as he doesnt know what he can expect better gear up with my over the top battle suit its one thing that he starts with such equipment and its another that he thinks he will need it.
This rubs me in so many bad ways i am not really good at explaining but come on if an experiment gos wrong that is supposed to make a portal to another dimension wich is conducted thousand of miles away you dont expect to have company any time soon.
This kind of reasoning is what we call the MC has read to many light novels so he became survival specialist in fantasy settings or whatever.
The kid just knows what to do at any given time his background doesnt cover that he just trained in combat tactics and trained his body thats about it.
The Mc also likes to talk about honor and that running away in a fight while your comrades fight is not honorable then 2 min later he gos on that life before pride is the way to go.
I am not so sure if the author forgot what the Mc just said 1 chapter ago or even in the same chapter not so sure but seriously did he just say that?
I dont care if he kills any sentient race he comes across (just because) but pls dont talk about honor when you clearly dont have it.
Everything he has was given to him he hasnt worked for anything a single freaking day except what has been told to us but in the novel itself he hasnt worked for anything as it came to him deity skills super armor ect ect.
So to give a conclusion the story just feels so boring as there is no adreline all that happens is to be expected i a