Life of the dark god
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
This is the story about the young god Hikaru. He was born in an old world and had to fight through a lot of hardships since birth. His strong character got formed by all the things which happened to him during his fights. Follow the dark god through his trials and adventures to become a higher beeing.
(hopefully it will be the first of 3 seasons)
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2017
- Author
- Wokcommander
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 102
- Views
- 245,545
Chapters(132 total)
- Chapter 29 Roles reversedJul 25, 2017
- Chapter 28 starting the searchJul 22, 2017
- Chapter 27 Leaving school for a whileJul 15, 2017
- Chapter 26 Open worldJul 12, 2017
- Chapter 25 Important announcementJul 9, 2017
- Chapter 24 SpiritJul 6, 2017
- Chapter 23 To the rescue, again?Jul 3, 2017
- Chapter 22 Going out to visit the cityJun 30, 2017
- Chapter 21 The human continent hosts a tournament?Jun 27, 2017
- Chapter 20 A tough lessonJun 24, 2017
- Chapter 19 Using learned thingsJun 21, 2017
- Chapter 18 Strange news (2)Jun 18, 2017
- Chapter 17 Strange news (1)Jun 15, 2017
- Chapter 16 rune class (2)Jun 12, 2017
- Chapter 15 rune class (1)Jun 9, 2017
- Chapter 14 Explaining the planJun 6, 2017
- Chapter 13 A plan for creating a new forceJun 4, 2017
- Chapter 12 Checking up on the kidsJun 1, 2017
- Chapter 11 first magic lesson (2)May 30, 2017
- Chapter 10 first magic lessonMay 29, 2017
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Community Reviews(2)
- Super-SonicRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Some parts at the beggining I didn't enjoy at all but in all fairness it getts better and is ok in most aspects later on in the story.
- AntnyTPRoyal Road★★ 1.5The synopsis reads like a wuxia/xianxia novel, and I really don't like it. I always hated how they have to summarize a novel with them bragging about themselves, rather than talking about the main plot. It serves its purpose as an attention grabber, but at the same time, this turned me way off. The plot should be what hooks me in. The characters should be what makes the journey very enjoyable.
I didn't read much; only finished about a bit of the prologue.
I did have problems with grammar and it made it a chore to continue reading. The way you denote a person speaking is personally off-puting for me. This read more like a play for a theatrical piece, rather than a novel.
I also did have problems with some dialogue, which could possibly be fixed by contents from future chapters that I haven't read.
For example:
“Yeah, yea you are right. So, what will his name be? If you want my opinion it should be something like first. I mean we hopefully will get another one and we could name it second so there will be no problems with naming.”(Stupid Father)
That was taken from the prologue. The grammar issue aside, I had a hard time understanding what the third sentence is trying to say. Is the father suggesting that the name be First? Or are you saying the name should be synonymous with the word "first"? This is where grammar would make it less ambiguous.
Also I don't know if it's anyone else, but the father sounded rather submissive. I don't have any trouble with the father being submissive, but I just want to point it out to make sure you know about it.
In a decently healthy relationship, there wouldn't be a need to say "If you want my opinion." Communication would flow naturally, in this context. Saying "if you want my opinion," makes me think that this isn't a normal relationship. The father felt the need to preface his statement with "if you want my opinion," because there's been some sort of past events that probably scarred him, and now makes him coat his sentence with "if