Level system vs Cultivation methods

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Description

Experience vs Meditation.Muscles vs jade-like skin.Medical treatment vs acupuncture.Engineering vs ancient knowledge.Humans vs immortals.

This is a story of Revolution.

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*Originally from Scribble Hub

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2021
Author: Bristlecone

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 2.9/ 5.0
Followers: 92
Views: 125,749

Chapters(87 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

cyrocksnakeRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
listen,I know the reviews of this novel is bad but I assure you that the story is one of my favourite of all novel I've read.the writing style might be a little loose and missing lots of context but it makes sense the more you read about it.the author might not gave some of the side character enough screen time to get attached with but that didn't stop me from thinking what is the character doing off-screen like how the side character getting married and had children and grows up with them instead of just stopping right there.anyway if you are a person that like a consistent fast forward story where it focuses on the world instead of the mc,then this story suits you nicely.
MrPanda1Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
I feel the guy above me was a bit too harsh. I agree that you should find a beta, and I mean a beta that will talk with you on how to make your story better. The title is a bit bland but is self explanatory, your summary sucks a bit.
The story itself needs some work. The plot is moving very slowly, and sometimes there really isn't any progress at all.
I think the story could actually turn out better than this, but as I said it needs some serious work.
alcelaphinaeRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
i readed to 52. chapter.
its not bad, i gave low rating for several reasons but further reviews needed. Concept is good. I sick of tired from these chinese cultivators. They dont make sense. But execution is kind of childish and boring. It was like reading a chronological summary of events.
for example:
in 2019 wuhan, covid19 appeared and bla bla bla
in 2020 at Monkey month covid19 announced as pandemic and bla bla bla
dialogues are so two dimensional.
So with this "summary type of events" and "two dimensional dialogues" whole novel became boring and childish.
jadecriminalRoyal Road
★ 1.0
I cecked this out since it showed up in trending. I was hopefull since it looked like deconstructio of Cultivation stories.
Unfortunately I started reading:
This is not storytelling. At best this is a chalk outline of a story, as it has been murdered.
Idea is good but unless this is just an outline used to draw up a comic it really doesn't work.
There are some good ideas here:
Perhaps some articles and youtube videos on good storytelling?
Like anything it takes some work to become good at stuff.
rgreadsRoyal Road
★ 1.0
Poor machine translation is not a writing style.
I suspect (hope?) that Bristlecone is not a native English speaker. They have an interesting premise but decided to mimic the broken, fragmentary grammar, sentence structure and character speech of poorly translated light novels and xanxia stories.
It's painful to watch someone trying this hard with this poor of results. Bristlecone, please take a break, read some of the top rated stories here, and contrast those writing styles to your own. When you understand the difference, come back for a rewrite pass and then continue.
Frederick Elliott WalkerRoyal Road
★ 0.5
so i got to chapter 6, then skimmed ahead in chapters to the second to last to see if there was improvement. there was but not a lot.
So grammar first: (tried to give 0 stars but 1/2 star is lowest i can give) It barely exists, making the story hard to follow, understand, and/or enjoy. Because of the style use to tale the story the bad grammar sticks out like a world tree in a dirt field.
Next the Style: It is talking from one character to another, with thoughts and sound effects thrown in. different from most stories i have read on the web, but the grammar really messes with it.
Now to the characters: Not a lot of depth to the characters, MC is good cultivators are bad, focus is on their actions, again the grammar and the style make character development seem shallow and rushed.
Story: evil cultivators vs MC with a leveling magic/knowledge system that is voiced by a past life. Mostly seems to point out lots of flaws in cultivation novels, maybe like a rant in story form? but i think the idea is a good one, if just told in first or third person with better grammar.
overall grammar and style that this story is written in makes it hard to read. If grammar was fixed, i think that it would be easier to read but i feel like the style will still seem strange.