Legacy of the Ancient

Self-Published

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Description

In the world of Nazula, where magic andbeastsexist, a heroleft behind his legacy when he mysteriously vanishes.

Thousands years later, when abilities and talents are absolute necessities,atalentless orphaned boy named Cain is given a book by anold manwho teaches him aboutfightingand magic.

Little does he know, the very book he is given is a useless treasure left behind by the hero.

With the help of useless treasure, Cain the talentless is ready to change his fate.

An original series by me, and Mega Chintasih as my grammar police(up to ch. 3). Cheers!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Ezervane

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 368
Views: 156,698

Chapters(49 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

ILoveAnimeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Really good novel, hard to put it in word but it feels real. Novel is good at conveying mood to reader. MC is not typical revenge/stoic/angst and I didin't get the feeling that mc was put on pedestal forcefully.
Story and characters really stand out in good way from most novels atm. And although one could say its bit rushed, I think in these web novels bit "rushed" may even be a good thing.
Overall as I was reading novel I just liked it and didn't find anything that I would change. Easily top 10 material.
Pygmalion8413Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Love the idea, and it is decently executed. But the grammar just destroys it. Either brush up on your grammar or get a dedicated editor.
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badw0lfRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
At this point, I have enjoyed this story greatly. I will state that I don't necessarily look for or worry about anything with grammer or spelling, so while others may have problems there, the main thing I look for in a story is whether or not it is interesting/original and if it is fun to read. This story is everything that I look for in a story here, interesting, original, and just plain fun to read.
MattajRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I read through 14 chapters that are available and I must say that it is a pretty good story. Story telling is enjoyable and keep you interested. Characters are good but sometimes there is not enough information (similar to the world).
A twist early in the story almost made me want to stop reading but it was so good so far that I decided to continue and I was not dissapointed. On the other hand, it feels a bit rushed but we will see in the future.
Good job author and continue until the end of a story or at least book/volume so we will not feel dissatisfied when the story will be dropped, which is happening on royalroadl often recently.
Wickedly_DesignedRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I did not get far. What I did manage to read through was sort of engaging and the idea seemed solid, but the grammar is a serious problem that goes beyond just typos: trouble with tenses, conjugations - what little there even exists in English - and plural. Sometimes the author tries to use advanced punctuation, but just manages to butcher complete sentences, like here:
"Palvaran Orphanage only had five orphan kids, because orphaned kids were mainly victims from war, in this peaceful time; therefore, there were only a few of them. " (4th January, 2018, Chapter 1)
If you read and actually understand the sentence the way grammar says you should, then it states that 'in these peaceful times orphans come to be mostly as a result of wars' - quite conradictory, right? The semicolon just adds to the confusion, only there as far as I can guess because of the use of "therefore"...
As for the rest of the points: the grammar doesn't let an actual style show itself, making the story read like a bad translation.
My scores for story and character are kind of an optimistic estimate, given how little I was willing to read from the story, the extra half-star I subtracted from the character score ws because of the don't call me an old man cliche that I personally cannot believe has any place in any story, let alone one with a medieval setting, as in most such worlds being able to become old is a serious compliment, given how they managed to survive far longer than their peers...
To sum it up: Author! Get yourself an editor, a proofreader, grammarly, whatever, for currently you are castrating a story that has an actual chance to become something good if you let it...
FunkyFlameRoyal Road
★ 1.0
I can't begin to try and convey the amount of grammatical sins that have been committed throughout the first 5 chapters, it's mentally scaring and to be quite honest I feel that if the story had been Google translated it would make more sense.
The story is badly explained and any semblance of plot has yet to be introduced (even with a time jump of 10 years) the characters are so underdeveloped that the other orphans literally only exist to be friends with the MC. They have no motivation of their own, no individual characteristics and zero importance to the "story".
While I may be sounding harsh, I believe that for Ezervane to become a better writer he has to understand that his characters have to be more interesting and unique in order to create a relationship between them and the reader, not make their main motivation "we're friends so I'm going to give up on this major position of power to become a hunter instead". You characters MUST show emotions. When the MC was being beaten by Orphan#1(Hugo?) He showed not anger at being weak or resentment for Hugo for being naturally strong.
I may have rambled slightly but the fact of the matter is this. You need to work on your basics, grammar, character design, story structure, before you try a complete novel.