Legacy of Terra: Forgotten

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I'll be blunt. I am NOT going to finish this story, not in its current state. That's why, I'm rewriting it from the very beginning. The new version of Forgotten, and the one that will have a proper ending, you can find here on Royal Road under a brand new title -Terra's Demons: Forgotten.

Lucas, codename Helix, is the combat techno-medic of Demon squad. It was their task to protect Station 37-H and projectGoliath. All Lucas is certain of is that something went terribly wrong in what was going to be their last stand. He was prepared to meet them on the other side. Instead, he finds himself in a familiar place surrounded by faces he has never seen before. His last memory separated by centuries from the present.

His first priority is to find his squad. His second one is to keep the secrets ofGoliath.His third priority is to figure out how to achieve the previous two because he and the entirety of Demon squad have become nothing but spectres in the annals of history. He has become forgotten.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2019
Author: M. R. Aze

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Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 1,022
Views: 271,627

Chapters(30 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

Abnormal01Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story captures the readers' attention right away with an action-filled prologue and the pace continues from there as we see our protagonist explore their environment. The style of the story captures the essence of a cyberpunk/futuristic tale with the setting being space. The story itself is interesting with intrigue and action at the forefront only a few chapters in. The grammar of the story is adequate, being above the aver royalroad quality with only some misspelled words. The characterization of the story is the best part in my opinion, with each character introduced being vibrant, and easy to imagine. Overall this story is one with a lot of potential that I hope to see continued.
RougeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Unknowingly, I let myself be led by the hand in this universe, too enraptured with the story around me to recognise what was happening.
I started comparing the context of this story akin to a Warhammer 40K universe, then realised it was to happen after the fall of the Empire. Here we follow our hero as he evolves in this strange yet familiar environment.
It is a strange alchemy that can be found here. This work is a weave of contradicting things that kept me reading avidly, kindling my curiosity and interest at every corner.
The suspense is ever present, yet everything could be considered safe. We find a powerful character in a state of permanent weakness, strong yet a breath away from eternal doom. In charge but not really, with allies that aren't, enemies that did what his couldn't when they tried to.
It could seem complex, but it is not. Because following our hero, we learn as he does, his environment as alien to him as it is to us. And then we learn about him, how he is an altered version of what we think we are, yet is as we are at the same time. I freely let myself be led through the halls of the space station, wondering about the derelict building that I pictured clearly yet had never seen precisely described. Because it was but I forgot, or it never was and it wasn't needed.
I care about the characters, and hate some of them at the same time, the main character included. I know them enough to do so, I came to know of them and trust some more than our hero. Yet, he is the only one that I want to follow around, just to know. To see. To learn and be astonished.
Yes, there are one or two words with misplaced letters, but nothing jarring enough for a casual reader to even notice them. The view is worth the trip, and the story is not finished yet: to me it was an unexpected journey to a destination I did not know I wanted to see. And now, aboard the ship, I am looking everywhere, hoping to gleam some clues and full of fascination.
Yes, read this. It was great, and
kronosxviiiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's been at least a year since a story has immersed me as much as this one has.
Style:
The authors style of writing feels well set in stone and luckily for us readers it's a positive thing because the pacing is great.
Story:
Surprisingly even though there are 18 chapters at the point in time of this review being made, the story has a LOT of depth to it. Or at least I can feel the abyss just beyond the horizon that this story will drag us to.
Grammar:
Overall the story has very few mistakes and thankfully the author is one of the reasonable ones on RoyalRoad who is will to work with people on fixing them.
Character(s):
I like the main character and the secondary cast, though we've only been looking at the external layers I'm sure the onions will continue peeling away at a reasonable pace as the story continues.
Interactions between characters feels real and more importantly side characters feel like real people and not blocks of wood with smiles sharpied onto their faces. :3
hi&helloRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
All in all I really like this story, which is why I look past the flaws. Th grimmer isn't perfect; awkward framing and mixed up words, but that's just self editing for ya. I like the characters and I actually enjoy multiple POV's in this case though I think it gets a little bogged down by frequent switching and too many selected POV's. because of this some characters come of a bit confusing in there motivations or simplistic.... mainly they just deal off at times? But I love this kind of lost technology story so I'll keep reading so long as it doesn't go off the deep end.... damn I think this sight has given me trust issues.
Pethrai DarkosRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story is admittedly not the best I've ever read. Grammer issues never devolve to the point that you can't understand what's being said but typos are prevelant and commas are overused. Most of the characters are flat, a trait that is not helped by the third person omniscient POV, and the ones who aren't don't get enough focus. In addition a number of plot hooks are introduced early on without any of them getting resolved. Some of them, like what exactly Goliath is are long term plots that need to be set up early; others like Docter Werner's well earned antipathy towards Alexandra von Eisstahl are briefly mentioned before getting overtaken by events.
Now with that out of the way let me get on to the good points of the story. The action is well written and we get a MC who can come out on top in most fights without making the reader think that he can't possibly lose. The characters who actually get significant characterization are.. well not well rounded but engaging and have multiple motivations. The constant hints about the wider galaxy are tantalizing and indicate a rich world that will be revealed to us in time. The tech seems intruiging while not being so overpowered as to become a deus ex machina or underpowered such that it's modern tech with a sci-fi skin. Also it's a story about a friggin super soldier coming out of cryosleep to find a galaxy in a state of technological decline! That premise is hard to find but always rewarding if the auther can pull it off. I eagerly await new chapters.
HorathioRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This review is written after the release of chapter 15. Update 1 after chapter 21.
First of, I really like the premise of this story. It's a time-displacement story completely set in the future of humankind. Both the original time of the MC as well as the later time when the story takes place are well within the age of space colonization, although the time inbetween seems to have been a decline in technological and other capabilies of humankind instead of progress. Without going into details and spoilers, dealing with an unfamiliar environment and time, military secrets and intrigue, political machinations, fast paced action and life on a space station are all part of the early story so far.
The scenes are mostly well written and the language / used vocabulary is good, although frequent grammar and spelling mistakes often detract from this fact and make immersion difficult.
As a note to the author, this is in my opinion the biggest issue with this story at the moment, but also the easiest to fix by doing editing passes and using spell and grammar check aids like grammarly or others. I would definitely revise this review in the future, if this aspect improves.
What we can see of the worldbuilding so far is very good with ample material to draw from in the future. Backstory and worldbuilding is well integrated into the scenes, without too much info dump. MrAzE manages to paint a living picture of the world outside of the immediate confines of the story and to whet the appetite to explore this universe with the MC(s).
The characters. This is a bit more difficult to review. So far we have 5 character POVs, one of which I would call the MC. The author manages quite well to keep the views and knowledge of each character separate. Each character has enough backstory to be unique and fleshed out and they are all promising.
Update 1: I have been assured that my previous fears with regards to the direction of the story have been unfounded. The last couple of new chapters seem
MrHrulginRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The story has really good bones, but is crippled by weak secondary characters and truly bad grammar. There are sentences that are not just incomplete but totally incomprehensible with missing words, and the author switches back and forth between using different words (sword and sward is the most egregious.) I just can't keep reading it. It needs an editor too badly.
dabo1Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The story developed fairly ok at first, but the end of the story is not at all satisfying. Lots of side stories are just started and don't progress. It feels like the author just wanted to quit the book but didn't want to leave it without an ending. Character development is also mostly missing.
SleeplessStonerRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Interesting enough, I guess. The writing is jarring at time with the PoV changes, and the endless variety of editing errors and spelling mistakes make it a bit difficult to parse. Not very descriptive, the alien species were not really explained well enough to understand what they were, but otherwise it has a good idea to start out with. Sadly the story ends at a imo very badly placed cliffhanger, with the reader simply left confused. What was the point? What even was the goal of being there anyway? None of this is explained, and it doesnt help the plot at all. Man wakes up, is supposed to be a super soldier, and just blindly follows the orders of an A.I that is clearly sketchy as hell, and apparently falls in love with the first girl he decides to save, causing him to make random irrational decisions that a genetically engineered super solider shouldnt make imo.
Would probably give it 3.0 if there was proper editing done to fix up the mistakes and possibly fix some points that dont really mesh well but thats just my thoughts.
a_man_in_blackRoyal Road
★ 0.5
there's only one character in the entire story who isn't an asshole, and she's the constant tragic victim. everybody is an asshole. the mc's an asshole, the other characters are assholes, the galaxy is an asshole. it's all assholes for all of existence. the whole story is just assholes.
the author took one look at everything grim and dark with warhammer 40k, dante's inferno, the classics of greek tragedy, the ending of romeo and juliet, all the pointless deaths in game of thrones, ate it all up and said "that's too happy for me..."
the grammar is nearly perfect.
the style is exceptional and the writing flows.
the story jumps back and forth between current events and dramatic flashbacks to an inverted version of warhammer's "holy terra", only without the comedy and somehow even LESS compassion than you'll find scattered around the 40k universe. the whole story paints a picture of a warped nightmare of a universe that seems to exist simply to be an asshole, and all of the characters except for hapless security girl are so caught up in being assholes to everyone else, you never see the other side of the coin that may give you a chance to get invested in them. they're all just one-dimensional assholes from the asshole dimension, so there's no room for anything else that may lead me to care about any of them. the best thing that could happen to the whole storyverse here would be for it to collapse into an asshole singularity and spark a new big bang and try again, hopefully with maybe a little less asshole flavor.