King of Kings

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"ENDLESS!! This world is endless!

There is nothing in this world except monsters. No land, no oceans, no mountains, no sun, no moon, no day, no night. Nothing but an endless amount of monsters roaming around killing and fighting each other endlessly."

A boy stuck in an Endless Void roaming around endlessly only to kill monsters aimlessly. One day he was transported into a new world with a new body named Gio. Given this rare opportunity to finally be free from that hell-like Endless Void, he swore to be the ruler of this new world one day.

** This novel will emphasise Army-building, Kingdom-building, bloodline and romance in a Fantasy Ancient-Era background. So if you like any of those please stay tuned and give feedbacks on how I can improve my writing skills. I will try to update this novel AT LEAST once a week. Once I improve my writing skills and found my writing style, I will try to increase the amount of releases. So please give me lots of feedbacks be it critics or compliments it will certainly help me.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: FKU3

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 12
Views: 4,649

Chapters(13 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

brackahuantousRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It was a pretty hectic start, especially with the fight. The main characters are pretty cool and I like that they are not all the same. Grammer still needs work, but you can see the writing improvements from the first chapter to the latest.
The highlights are the story's progression and the mc on how he will go about his goals, I'm excited to see what's next!
legacyoflightRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Writing this review is a little tricky for me because I have ADD, and my mind is always jumping from one thought to another, but I’ll try to stay on track! KING grabbed my attention right away with its powerful opening—a scene so raw and emotional that I could feel the tension building in my chest. It sets the tone for the whole story, showing how brutal and unjust the world can be, but also planting a seed of hope for change.
The characters are what really stood out to me. Bjorn, the leader of the Ursus Tribe, wrestles with this massive decision to leave his people behind to chase peace in a chaotic world. Then there’s Bo, his little brother, who is suddenly thrust into this huge responsibility of becoming king. Each character feels so real—Bo’s youthful determination, Eira’s sharp, no-nonsense attitude, and Nero’s mix of pride and vulnerability. They remind me of how messy life can get when emotions are high and people don’t see eye to eye.
The worldbuilding is incredible. The idea of Mantles—supernatural weapons—is so cool. It made me imagine all the battles and possibilities tied to these artifacts. But it’s not just about the action; the story also dives deep into questions about leadership, purpose, and what it means to fight for something bigger than yourself.
I have to say, as someone who often struggles to stay focused, KING kept pulling me back in with every scene. The mix of heart, action, and big-picture themes is perfect for someone like me, who loves stories with depth but also thrives on constant movement and excitement.
If you’re looking for a story that’s both thought-provoking and full of adventure, KING is one to read. It’s about survival, dreams, and figuring out who you’re meant to be—and it’s the kind of story that sticks with you.
Ana87Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The story raises interesting themes such as hope, freedom and the search for purpose. The first chapter is very immersive and pulls you into a beautiful but cruel world through vivid descriptions.
By the time I am writing this review the story has not got many chapters and it gradually introduce us to the worlbuilding, the dynamics of the tribe, the personal conflicts of the characters and the external threats.
While reading I couldn't help but feel like I was watching an anime episode. In fact, Bo's declaration to revive the tribe and become the king of the conquerors reminded me of characters such as Naruto or Astra from Black Clover. It is quite enjoyable if you like this kind of stories.
There are characters like Bjron and Bo that are well portrayed while others could have more development to relate to the reader. However, as the story is just beginning perhaps later on we can learn more about their motivations and personal histories.
Some transitions between key moments in the story can feel too fast. This could be fixed by adding more description or building on previous tension.
Overall, it is a story with a lot of potential that is just beginning.
Googleme3Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I think this is one of the unique and interesting plots on this website. So from a story perspective I’d give it a 5/5. But from a writing style it still needs some work being that it’s from omniscient pov and sometimes hard to track what’s happening.
Up to this point though the story has a lot going for itself and it carries some cliche stereotypes it seems to go about them in really powerful ways.
excited to see what’s next!
jewel-degradationRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The dynamic between the characters is absorbing, especially in how they’re forced into uneasy alliances, but moments like the group’s arrival on the island and Bo’s intense showdown with Joar feel a little rushed, there’s so much action that it sometimes does not leave time for the tension to build. For example, Joar’s threats are unsettling, but the rapid escalation from him demanding Feng to full-scale combat sacrifices the chance to show how dangerous he truly is before the fight starts. I’d love to see the story take more time to delve into the characters’ internal struggles, their backstories, and the unique traits of the world, especially the mana system and the significance of the island itself. you have rich lore here in the story waiting to be explore, cant wait to see the rest, honestly my criticisms are only supplementary to the storys length so far, but its a story that has a lot of promise.
wigochickRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I really like stories about slaves gaining freedom and learning to live freely again so the premise had me from the start. There are some great and strong characters and story beats being introduced here, and they lend themselves well to the energetic dialogue and action. I think so far there may be a few characters in the story that are still a bit lost in the background, so I hope they get further developed. Like Kirby, I don't have a good sense of him yet in these early chapters.
The writing could do with some more polishing and editing though. I especially hope if this does get edited, that some of the too modern-sounding descriptions or lines get adjusted to help make the readers feel more immersed in the setting and story. The writer's obvious passion and energy make up for some of the rougher aspects of the writing though. I hope he continues with this, maintaining his enthusiasm for the story while improving on his style. Some of the more specific criticisms I had about the writing were already mentioned by other reviews, so I hope the writer takes these notes to heart and adjusts/improves accordingly.
CKJ5Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Disclaimer: This review is based on the first chapter and may not reflect the story as a whole.
King of Kings is described as a military progression story featuring fantasy, adventure, action elements, and a strong male lead.
There’s a lot happening in the opening chapter, and it gave me a real Avatar: The Last Airbender vibe. The story is written in third-person omniscient, which works well for a large cast. The protagonist, Bo, is the younger brother of the king, Bjorn. Long story short—the king unexpectedly announces his decision to embark on a solo mission, leaving his tribe behind. The core elements of the story are present, but some parts of the conversations feel inconsistent. For instance, a character might seem relaxed about the king’s departure one moment, only to react with sudden anger the next. This abruptness makes the dialogue feel a bit unpolished, but the underlying foundation of the story is strong.
Grammatically, the chapter could use some refinement. One major area for improvement is the handling of dialogue tags, as errors in this area can be distracting for readers. Additionally, the use of all caps and bold text for emphasis feels more like a stylistic distraction than a narrative enhancement. I’d recommend reconsidering these choices to maintain a polished and professional tone.
Overall:
King of Kings lays a solid foundation for what could be a great tale. The characters are likable, and the world feels intriguing. With some polish, especially in grammar and dialogue, this story has the potential to deliver an epic adventure.
HarrYqRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Hey, here’s my review of the first five chapters of this story.
First off, the concept is really interesting. Even though the world hasn't been fully explored yet, the ideas introduced are fascinating.
The Mantles that grant magical power, the Outlands, and the outer world—these elements really drew me in. I'm especially intrigued by the Mantles’ power system. I’m curious to see how you'll handle that, as it hasn't been fully explained, but so far, it’s engaging and unique.
On the other hand, I struggled with the characters. It’s not that they’re uninteresting, but they seem to lack a unique 'voice' or 'soul.' Many of the dialogues and monologues feel like they’re speaking directly to the reader rather than to each other as characters. The dialogue feels unnatural, which made it harder for me to get invested in the characters from the start.
For example, there’s a line like this:
“Joar's fatigue will work to my advantage,” he realized. “I have to bide my time and seize the opportunity to strike.”
It feels too explicit, almost like it’s just telling the reader that Joar is tired, even though we’ve already seen his heavy panting. It might flow more naturally as:
“He’s getting tired,” he realized. “I need to use that to my advantage.”
I’m not saying the line itself is bad; it just doesn’t feel as natural since the readers already understand Joar’s exhaustion. Instead of telling us what Bo is feeling and thinking, try to show it. This relates to what I mentioned about characters
Voices, each one needs to have a distinct voice so that readers can identify who’s speaking without needing a tag. Right now, Bjorn and Bo often sound the same; they use similar language and tone in their dialogues. Leif, however, does have a unique voice in the story, and I could tell when he was speaking. Some of Nero’s lines also stood out, though less frequently.
In summary, your story has potential! The world and its unique concepts are intriguing, and I’m looking forward to seeing them unr
TheHofferRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall, this was an enjoyable read from start to finish. The very first chapter's initial hook of the Ursus Tribe arriving at a hard-fought destination but the tribe being decimated was a good touch.
The style in a lot of ways feels like the cast consists of some likeable rapscallions that gave me a lot of fun Naruto feels. There was the person with raw strength, the smart seeming cowardly type, the stern powerful type, and the one who works really hard. In a lot of ways, this set up was powerful. The lovable band of misfits against insurmountable odds in hostile terrain.
Some of the grammar and verb tenses didn't really work for me and it was the only thing that jarred me out of the story from time to time.
The strength in the story comes from wanting to know more about Bo's goals and what his reasons for becoming a king truly are, especially since the only example we have seen of a king involves sacrifice. It was fun to see the contrast between the two leaders.
I think establishing some of the power dynamic before an actual conflict might be helpful thought because when Jotunn Fang showed up, I didn't know who on the crew would be up to the task.
That being said, it's a fun short read and it's on my follow list. Tentatively excited to see more and understand how Mantles work!
BleakBlueJayRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I should preface by saying that I typically do not like shonen-like stories which this appears to be but was not advertised as. I'll try not to let this color my review, but I think it's worth mentioning, for my integrity, that this already wasn't my style, and I likely won't read past what I already have.
Starting with the positive, I can clearly see the vision that you're going for. Between the first and most recent chapters, I saw a lot of improvement in your technical skill as a writer. There's a lot within the story that is creative that I don't see much of if ever, and I always appreciate seeing uncommon things in the media that I consume. I can identify a lot with stories about groups of people losing their numbers and having their way of life or homelands threatened or completely destroyed, as well as stories that focus on how those same people try to fight back against their oppressive systems or try to revitalize their cultures. These themes are appealing to me, and to many others, so it's good to see them continue to be represented in stories like this.
That said, there's some problems, too.
Descriptions could be hit-or-miss. I think you'd benefit from researching different shades of colors (instead of reusing brown, try words like tawny, chestnut, bronze, auburn, bronze, almond, for example), more precise words ("long-sleeved tunic" instead of "Viking-styled long-sleeve shirt", since Vikings just wore tunics), but also learning when preciseness is odd (describing exact heights of characters or trees). I thought your metaphor uses (the magnet of the attention, pregnant pause) were colorful and interesting, though sometimes the wording or placement felt a little awkward. Learning when and how to do all of this is hard and takes a long time to perfect, so nobody is faulting you for it. Just keep working on it.
The grammar can sometimes leave something to be desired. Most of the grammatical mistakes are small and would probably be overlooked by most, but I