KAL BLADE

Self-Published

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Description

Newfound valley, not only known for it's beautiful forestery and waterfall, harbors all kinds of beings from ghosts to vampires. For centuries, the town is protected by a secret organization that scouts the night, hunting mythical beings down and eliminating them. They are known as Kal Blade.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Pracsolo

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 5
Views: 2,210

Chapters(13 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

Thunderbolt44Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I really like the plot and the world-building, mixing reality with mythology, but I feel like you're going a little too fast with it. There are moments that I read, where I don't understand how they came to a conclusion like that with little tell. May I recommend adding sub-plots to stretch out your characters daily lives and Implement more descriptions about them , example their facial features, what race they're from etc. Make their thoughts more relatable with the audience and it will get more viewers. With mystical objects you mention, you have described what the blade can do, you can also make add lore chapters to explore areas such as that, where readers can familiarize themselves with it. With the grammar, it's not bad but there is a repetition with the "he said, she said". It's a little annoying so try have different methods of expressing dialogue as well as describing what they're doing, while saying it. Give the readers some suspense too, rather than releasing whole chapters once. Apart from that, I really like where this plot is going. This has potential and I hope it will live up to it. That's all. Keep up the good work. :)