Kage no Kami
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Description
In this story i've really didn't put much effort into it. I mean it all came at me like a dream and some of the story were influence by a comic book character name The Punisher from Marvel. If i continue this story i am afraid it won't be good as i dream it would be, sometimes my friends told me to make some changes in my story to make it more comedy and romance. I actullay I wanted the genre to be Mystery, Action, Horror, and Tragedy, but of course they said it was too serious. So they made me change it and now it is what you are about to read! I was not happy for that, but i did what they told me anyways. So please enjoy this short story! I will make more soon if any of you like it somehow. Thank you for your time.
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Author
- Bigmanotaku123
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- Rating
- 2.0/ 5.0
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- 1
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- InslayerRoyal Road★★ 2.0To start things off. Your friends were partially right, because writing such a story with these genres is kinda... dull.
But of course there are always exception, like the novel worm. That novel is pretty good, and a few other novels from the same author.
Anyways why not put and an actual description at the description part ?
Now let me say my review : the plot feels rushed and full with plotholes, and things out of nowhere.
You also need to make your style better. It's a pain to my eyes in comparison to properly written novels.
Oh yea, I also forgot to mention that the plot moves way too fast, without any consideration for anything. No development, no proper information is given and spelling mistakes.
The idea is good, but the execution is awful.
Tl:dr
this story needs a complete rewrite, and from my 2 stars it can quickly go up to 5. Though yea the thing that need changes most of all, is the pace of the story, your way of writing, and some fixes to misspelled or wrongly placed words. So to readers: if you want a story so fast paced, that goes faster than sonic and can ignore most of the mistakes ( like I did ) you might like it. For those of you that don't like that sort of stuff, then don't read. It also has a nice since of comedy... yea I am trying to find the positive parts about this story. It feels like it was an idea, that was written just to exist.
And lastly for the author : romance might not be an issue depending on how you want your story to go, though I think it would be a nice twist to add the romance tag into your story author guy... mean bigmanotaku123... something like "bringing his wife back from the dead, traversing both heaven and hell and finding her soul." Wouldn't be that bad of a twist