Journey to the top

Self-Published

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Description

This is a story of certain Cultivator, who strived to become Immortal living among his peer. He succeeded, becoming one of the Heavenly Immortals. Life was perfect. But after being exiled for crimes he did not commit, he swore revenge against the Heavens themselves, and embarked on a difficult journey to Heaven itself, to exact his revenge against those who wronged him.

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Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Locust A.

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTURESCI-FIMARTIAL ARTSLOW FANTASYCYBERPUNKURBAN FANTASYCULTIVATIONWUXIA

Royal Road Stats

Rating
3.5/ 5.0
Views
1,284

Chapters(6 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

  • Eli'sPencilRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    Despite this being a review swap, I wanted to leave an honest review. I do not mean to come off as harsh, my words come from a place of positivity, and I would like to see the author grow.
    I will start with the positives first.
    Grammar: Grammar is the most important part of any story and the author nailed it. There are little to no mistakes, the word choice is diverse, and the language used feels fitting for the setting of the story.
    Story: As of the review, there are very few chapters released. The author's release schedule isn't very consistent and I hope they don't give up and continue the story. However, from what little I have to go on, the premise of the story is good. The concept of being kicked from heaven, only to then fight your way back is interesting. I haven't read many Chinese cultivation novels (I believe that's the genre here) but I think this concept is unique which gets bonus points. My one critique is that the pacing is sort of fast.
    Now for some of my critiques.
    Characters: Again, it's very early but the characters are sort of boring in my opinion. Their dialogue isn't very grandiose, which is a sort of staple in this genre. I can't really speak on their development since there isn't much to go on with there only being 6 chapters, but the characters are definitely a weak point.
    Style: The style is the part that I have the biggest issue with. The dialogue is written in a way that I have never seen before. It's very distracting and ruins my immersion as a reader. My suggestion is to redo the dialogue and use quotations rather than dashes to represent speech. For a lot of readers, this is an instant turn-off. However, the way the author describes the world and such is great! It's just the way dialogue is written really takes you out of the story for me.
    I genuinely believe a rewrite could fix a lot of these issues. Just fixing the dialogue alone would lift this story from a C- to a solid B or higher depending on how the future chapters pan out. It c
  • PixxieRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    Alright, now for my review. This story is a great way to explore this cultivation genre. The grammar is definitely amazing as most webnovelists struggled with the grammar, and this author managed to nail that part, except the dialogue and thoughts. To be honest, the characters are kind of boring, even though it's the first few chapters and the dialogue is not even in quotes and the thoughts aren't typed in italics which is what most authors do and I think it's honestly stupid. Other than that, I think it's great and I hope the author continues writing through and through.