Joe in medieval fantasy world

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2015

Author

MightTeddy

• 6. 1-sided Night Massacre
  Sep 26, 2016
• 5. The Black Night
  Sep 22, 2016
• 4. Report Report
  Sep 19, 2016
• 3. Civil War
  Aug 17, 2016
• 2
  Aug 10, 2016
• 1
  Aug 10, 2016
• Daily Life - Part 2
  Aug 3, 2016
• 1. Daily Life - Part 1
  Jul 29, 2016
• Side Story 1
  Jul 27, 2016
• V2 - Chapter 10: Dragon meeting
  Jan 11, 2016
• V2 – Chapter 9: Black Death
  Dec 31, 2015
• V2 - Chapter 8: Guns and Herbs
  Dec 30, 2015
• V2 – Chapter 7: The making
  Dec 28, 2015
• V2 – Chapter 6: Shocking development
  Dec 27, 2015
• V2 – Chapter 5: The wild
  Dec 26, 2015
• V2 - Chapter 4 : Progression
  Dec 8, 2015
• V2 - Chapter 3 – The Queendom of Mulier
  Dec 4, 2015
• V2 - Chapter 2: The oracle and the Queen
  Dec 3, 2015
• V2 – Chapter 1: Bye bye bye
  Dec 2, 2015
• Volume 2 – Prologue
  Dec 1, 2015

Reviews

Community Reviews(8)

• Silverthor1Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  A bit of a shaky start on this one but it develops into something really worth reading.
  keep up the good work.
• wohlzyRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This is not an actual review, i will do it when i actually read the story.
  I just wanted to say something to Drakus2 about his review (and people who will agree with him. I can understand that you don’t like bad grammar and you actually gave tip on how The author could improve even if you were a bit (awfully) harh by saying that it is unreadable and that the whole story should get a rewrite.
  I can understand that you put a bad ‘overall’ score because of it but you actually can’t judge the style/story/character so low when you didn’t even bother reading the story (unless i’m wrong and that you like nothing in this story). That is just reducing the score of the story and if you did good by giving tip for the grammar then you did shit by rating the rest low and not talking one bit about it.
  I’d like to see people giving fair review to a story and i say that’s not what you did. (Once again maybe i’m wrong and your use of words made me misunderstand)
  *start reading*
  Actual review :
  I just readed all the chapter straight.
  I got into the story really fast and i was greatly surprised. The whole thing is more comedy centered and i was never bored while reading, Some elements and events seem to appear randomly for our mc but the way it is described and the way things are solved always make it interesting and not 'out of place' for the whole story is built with events like these more or less important but there is nothing left out in a corner and we always hear about them sooner or later even if the event is finished. (thinking about the dragons from the beguining)
  I think the pace is good, and the time skip are nicely used, even the whole training time skip don't feel weird for we have a good explaination of each skill/title and we even get a flashback later.
  The grammar isn't that bad, of course there is some mistake but overall it doesn't bother me to read it (maybe because i'm not english) and we can see that it get better in the last chapters.
  The characters are interesti
• avinashRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  need more chapters and fast updates. loving the story. when are you bringing him near civilization?
  want to read that . it will fun if you update alteast once a day.
  need more chapters and fast updates. loving the story. when are you bringing him near civilization?
  want to read that . it will fun if you update alteast once a day.
• BlobRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  The story is quite hard to read and you really need to work on the way you express things. Overall its an ok read
• VarkathRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  So, author... this may hurt a bit, but comments are personal impressions and critique to help you develop your skills as a writer and write awesome stories more.  It is NOT my intent to discourage you writing new works! :)
  Overall: 3, Don't get down.  First novel.  Can't write a masterpiece easily and useless fluff ratings will hurt you long term.
  Style: 2.5 - I feel you need to ask yourself "What do i want to accomplish with this story."  You start with a great concept by bringing in the "Knowledge" aspect and has a lot of potential.  But if you set a clear goal then you can map out events and will allow parts to flow together smoothly.  Right now they do not, shifting between major events feels like a pinball in a machine and looses the reader on what is going on and why.
  Story: 2 - Namely due to the same reasons as Style.  There isn't a sense of purpose in your plot as many of them already conflict/contradict each other, or I am simple left quite a bit lost and/or confused.  Many things seem added hodge podge because they seemed "cool".  Modern tech can be cool to bring in, but "Just Happening" leaves the reader with that impression of wtf.  Right now not sure if your going Screwball Comedy (Re:Hamster), Serious/Semi-Serious, or just slapping out a Personal Fantasy Dream... leaves reader (ME) lost.
  Grammer: 4 - Solid use of english, punctuation, and such factors.  Some places can be touched up but I think these will fix themselves with improving your story goal and style mix.
  Character: 2 - Can't give you this one, MC starts with a good base for solid Character Dev, but the story doesn't deliver on the follow-up.  Good characters need to have a basis and show a growth or exploration of character as story goes on.  I.E.  Main MC adapting to a new world, or Meeting a character and understanding them through their actions.  Just like normal people have major traits that are hard to change, but grow with time.
  Final Notes:  Don't try to rush chapters just to get out
• MattajRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Content is even interesting but style needs some work. I enjoyed reading it but it kinda gets boring and you start skipping parts until you simply stop reading.
  Review made by reading up to first half of 1. Daily Life - Part 1 .
• sabethunder8Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Dude I love the story but it's  kinda hard to read. When I started reading, it was fine but after chapter 9 it got hard to read. That's the only problem I have encountered, so after you look over the chapters or get an editor I might reread and change the overall score.
• Drakus2Royal Road

  ★ 0.5

  I will edit the first paragraph, to show what needs to be done.
  "In another universe, on a certain world called Infanadah, layed countless kingdoms and clans that had been in conflict for thousands of years. It had 2 continents namely: Asili and Andaue. Similar to earth it had 4 seasons but with 14 months and 28 hours a day. The planet also included many non-human species,  magical races to be exact.
  One man and a very powerful being watched the planet from above. the man had newly cut black hair with a few white hairs even though he was just 22 years old. He was 1.69 meters in height, had light brown skin, brown eyes, and an above average face. (he had inherited spanish, caucasian traits from his ancestors) with a slightly chubby body, he could only do a maximum of 20 push-ups and curl-ups, this was due to his sit-at-home job (programmer) that made him chubby and also a little lazy at home. The name of that man was Joel."
  This is what the two paragraphs should look like. You need to pick a tense, past or present, it doesn't matter. I used past tense here namely using "was, could, and had." Instead of "is, can and has." You also need to stop going on weird tangents and focus every paragraph on one thought. So these two should really be 4 different paragraphs. This makes it really frustrating to read.
  But if you do these things then i might consider reading the story.