Isekai : How I Started A New Life as a Useless Side Character In The World Of Evelyn

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Leon XXXX, an american boy living in Texas picked up on a trending book among his highschool. He wanted to hop onto the trend, and began reading one of the many books in his bedroom that night, knowing well an assignment was due the next day. Hit with a sudden bout of dizziness, he crashes at his desk and wakes up to an entirely different world.When he comes to, he finds that he has isekaied into the crazy book called Evelyn!

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Lavunni

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICCOMEDYMALE LEADPORTAL FANTASY / ISEKAI

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Rating
4.3/ 5.0
Followers
10
Views
2,871

Chapters(7 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • Jonathan BRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    -I like how the story throws us right into the action, but
    it might also be worth considering having us spend a bit of
    time in the MC's original world. That way the story can more
    effectively highlight the dramatic change from one kind of
    life to the next.
    Ok, I read the next chapter and you
    jumped back a bit to flesh out your character, nice job, disregard
    the above paragraph, lol.
    -Blinking loosely, I realized this was not Texas. I found the
    line really funny, but maybe use another word besides loosely,
    feels like a bit of an odd expression.
    -Just a note, you jump between past and present tense a few
    times, I'd read your chapters aloud with either friends or
    family, make sure you lock down your preferred tense.
    -I like how you're setting up Leon, seems like a shy dude
    who just wants to fit in. I'm not sure if this was intentional,
    but it's ironic the guy was sent to an unfamiliar, new school,
    and now he's in an unfamiliar, new world.
    -I'd give the dialogue and scene descriptors another pass,
    there are quite a few grammatical errors, but more importantly,
    the way the characters are speaking could be improved, they
    sound a little stiff and unnatural.
    -I like Leon as a character, but what exactly does he want/is
    trying to accomplish? I know he wants to fit in and be
    included, but what's the guy's goal in life, and how is being
    sent to another world going to either help achieve or hinder
    that?
    -How did Leon get sent to another world? I know some stories
    just like to handwave the journey, but you've gone through
    all this trouble of setting up the book series is reading,
    does this have something to do with it? Are you able to imply
    some kind of magic at work?
    -I don't know about you, but if I'd suddenly grown a tail,
    I'd have a much stronger reaction than Leon did.
    -I like the concept of being born again as a useless side
    character. Your story could go in lots of interesting
    directions. Keep up the great work!