Our mc has gone through a life and death, a lazy God appeared before her and cast her aside into one of the game she was playing. An otome game which she has to strive her best to survive without ending up dead.

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★★★ 2.5

The story is good, the writing not so much.
Story and characters: The plot is obviously the strong point of this novel. There is a lot of interesting ideas.
As for the characters, at this point of the story, it's hard to judge. There are a lot of characters, and so far, none as been really developed.
Grammar: Not great, but not terrible either. It's readable.
Style: The weakness of this novel.
First of all, the punctuation is completely random. Some comas are missing, there are dots in the middle of sentances... It needs to be revised. Also, don't forget about capital letters.
The pace is way too fast. As I said before, there is a lot of interesting ideas in this story, but it's all hapenning too fast. Dear author, slow down! Take your time to introduce your world and your characters! We barely had the time to get to know your characters, they're already talking about war and complots. All of your characters seem to have an interesting background, yet, it's hard to get attached to them as you rush too much and don't take the time to develop them.
Ah and, I just said this but, introduce your world ! World building is important, especially when it comes to fantasy novels. I know that excessive world building can bore your readers, but here, it's the opposite. It's seriously lacking. We barely know anything about your world besides the random informations you add in brackets in the middle of the story. (By the way, you can't do that. I know it's your story, and it's your right, but you seriously can't add random notes in the middle of the story. It's confusing and it disrupt the read. If you have something to tell to your readers, the author's note section is made for it. Moreover, most of the information you add are worldbuilding elements. There are meant to be included in the story).
Overall, an interesting story with an awful execution. It could be so much better.

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