Intrinsics

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2020

Author

A Dreamer

• Chapter 10
  Mar 30, 2020
• Chapter 9
  Mar 23, 2020
• Chapter 8
  Mar 23, 2020
• Chapter 7
  Mar 16, 2020
• Chapter 6
  Mar 16, 2020
• Interlude 1: Gerhardt
  Mar 16, 2020
• Chapter 5
  Mar 9, 2020
• Chapter 4
  Mar 9, 2020
• Chapter 3
  Mar 9, 2020
• Chapter 2
  Mar 9, 2020
• Chapter 1
  Mar 9, 2020
• Prologue
  Mar 9, 2020

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• ZZZXRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  First of all, An interesting premise. I like the idea of the MC and his Jeep, and that did make me interested enough to want to know more about what will happen.
  If I would have some complaints I would say there are only 2 main points to be worked on:
  Editing: Nothing major really, but the story could make use of some proofreading to get through any misspellings or slightly incorrect grammar. Again this doesn't really affect the experience much if at all. and would be probably fixed in a few hours of work at most. (and I will re-edit this when it is done!)
  Characters: Well I am having some conflicted thoughts here, I found the MC interesting enough. even if at times I felt he was a bit too... accepting of things. I would understand his gamer mentality showing up, but I would expect a real person to be a bit more "confused" and to take slightly longer to process everything that was going on. Instead of having "oh its an isekai" as their first thought when they have no idea what happened. However, that could just be something for me personally
  The second character of the goddess has been just weird. However, I understand that makes sense as not much is revealed there. I will be waiting to re-evaluate this section as further is explored in the story.
  Finally, the biggest part about the characters is that I still don't feel that I am really engaged with any of them yet, But it is still very early on in the story so that would make sense
  Style-wise the story is very clear to go through and I have no issues with it overall, as it got the idea across clearly. There were very few instances where I felt there was either over-explaining or under-explaining but generally it was a minor part.
  In conclusion, I would recommend checking this story out, as most of the issues should be easily fixed and the premise and the story are interesting.