Into the Hedge [Knights of the Autumn Crown Book 1]

Information

Status

Completed

Year

2023

Author

Tel Gega

• Chapter 9
  May 8, 2023
• Chapter 8
  Apr 25, 2023
• Chapter 7
  Apr 21, 2023
• Chapter 6
  Apr 6, 2023
• Chapter 5
  Mar 21, 2023
• Chapter 4
  Mar 18, 2023
• Chapter 3
  Mar 15, 2023
• Chapter 2
  Mar 13, 2023
• Chapter 1
  Mar 11, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(6)

• Apollo149Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I will start by saying that the story seems like it has the potential to shine. The first chapter does a good job of drawing the reader in. Basically, Knights of the Autumn Crown is a fast-paced story. There is an immediate fast-paced tension. The stakes for the character are obviously extreme. The setting of the world seems to be very promising indeed. The main character has a lot of potentials. A few have already shown their strength. There is a number of unanswered questions. Such as, why exactly the main character has been transported to this terrifying world. It is something I hope is exciting and fun. I'm curious to see what happens next!
• GuthanRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I'm not too familiar with pulp fiction. From what I can see it looks okay if the idea is starting with a blast. I'd still say the absolute beginning section need a slightly slower pace to let the reader find their feet. Maybe a paragraph or two?
  Stylistically it was decently okay.
• raine.Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The outline of the story stands to be very intriguing, and the setting of the world seems to be be very promising indeed. The way the foreign characters talk set them apart from what we would expect to be normal characters.
  The main character seems to need to conceal their name and as such has been forcefully lent a name by her mysterious benefactor. There remain a lot of questions that seem like they have intriguing answers. Specifically, the answer to the question of why exactly the main character has been transported to this terrifying world is something I hope is exciting and fun.
  The major critique I have is with the grammar of the book; While the errors are not major enough to disrupt a pleasant reading experience, there are multiple and this definitely subtracts from the smooth quality of the world that would otherwise be stellar. A good idea would be to use a website to fix these errors, or have a native english speaker friend go over it and correct the errors.
  The descriptions of the setting seem very advanced, which allow the writer to paint a vivid scene.
  I sincerely hope the issues of grammar can be rememdied by the author, as this story seems like it has the potential to shine very brightly if a consistent update schedule can be maintained.
• davimaiRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  This first chapter does a good job of drawing the reader in. There is an immediate fast paced tension and the stakes for the character are obviously very high eg.  "ignoring every scrap and scratch, Dodging, jumping, and ducking through the dark forest, panting hard."
  Nice descriptions of the environment too.
  I'm not sure about this wording "maybe in her late teens" -  its perhaps a style choice, but I think the narrator or story-telling should be more sure of the character they're introducing, rather than using "maybe"  you know?
  There's a few things that could use some polishing. (Grammar, punctuation and some sentences could be tightened),a quick example is "as it rose up."  The word "up" is redundant :-)
  But those are easily fixed and the story shines through them.  Have you tried ProwritingAid?  That would help fix these.
  We also get a little bit of insight into the lead characters personality, with her initial rejection of the helping hand, even while she's fleeing danger. When she says "You're not going to do a damn thing to me!"
  When the gremlin calls her by name, we later find out that she doesn't believe that's her name. I think thats an important part of the story - But we don't realise its significance at the time, because we don't know her real name anyway.  It might be an idea to name her at the very start, so the gremlin using another name is immediatly significant to the reader.
  With some polish, this opening should make most readers of the genre at least want to check out what happens in chapter two. And that's the goal right?  So, well done!
• Miss NomerRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Knights of the Autumn Crown is a fast paced story with a sickly (in a good way) setting. The characters have a lot of potential and have already shown their mettle. I'm curious to see what happens next!
  Style: The writing shows a good understanding of what readers want. There are points of mystery and a fast pace that make me want to keep reading.
  Story: Although the overarching plot is not clear as of yet (no idea as to the characters' big motivations or goals), what we do know is very intriguing. Each chapter is a good size and furthers the plot in a noticeable way.
  Grammar and Vocabulary: As a previous review mentioned, each chapter has numerous spelling/grammar/word usage mistakes. These can be easily remedied using a website such as hemingwayapp.com. As for vocabulary, this author uses a wide variety of descriptive words to really paint a picture of the scene.
  Characters: As I mentioned earlier, I don't know their long-term goals. Yet, both main characters show an impressive amount of gumption and wile that may take them far in their journey. Both seem to be unique and non-stereotypical, and interacted in interesting ways.
  Tel Gega, thank you for writing, and keep up the good work!
• gwhitlockRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Overall, this fiction had an interesting premise, and the author jumped right into the action. However, I struggled with some of the dialog choices, such as the MC’s use of “ch’a” and all of the lines from the mysterious voice guiding the MC. Also, some of the figure of speech uses were clunky to reach, for instance “like the exhaust of a machine gun” used to describe puffs of air disturbing leaves.