Ins and Outs of Nature Magic [Old Version]

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

Wolfgang's Stance

• Rewrite Started!
  Feb 19, 2025
• Rewrite?
  Feb 17, 2025
• Djinn Contract
  Nov 26, 2022
• The Benefits to a Strong Mind
  Nov 25, 2022
• Leveling Up Montage
  Nov 24, 2022
• Goblin Time
  Nov 23, 2022
• Journey Away From Home
  Nov 22, 2022
• Taking the Training Wheels Off
  Nov 21, 2022
• Family Problems
  Nov 18, 2022
• Passing With Flying Dragons
  Nov 17, 2022
• Guild Hall Testing
  Nov 15, 2022
• Familiar Familiar
  Nov 14, 2022
• Unfamiliar Friends
  Nov 12, 2022
• Fruits of His Labor
  Nov 11, 2022
• Not Vines That Grapple To Me!!
  Nov 9, 2022
• Magic
  Nov 8, 2022
• A Whole New World To Get Used To
  Nov 8, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• M.J. MarkgrafRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  The setting is interesting. Kind of a slice of life if the world changed and everyone was turned into beast people. The closest analogy I can come up with is Beastars.
  The writing isn’t bad but it does feel rushed. Which isn’t a surprise considering it’s a writathon participant.
  The story moves at a quick pace. Sometimes this is good. But I think in this case it just leaves some things a bit confusing and the characters feeling a bit shallow.
  There are some grammar issues. Mostly having the wrong tense in certain spots. I can’t say I’m an expert in this area as I still get these wrong occasionally. I think the biggest thing is not mixing past and present tense.
  Here's an example: Roge smiled as he drinks in the details, glad that his small college town had stayed that way.
  Here's what it should say: Roge smiled as he drank in the details, glad that his small college town had stayed that way.
  Or: Roge smiles as he drinks in the details, glad that his small college town had stayed that way.
  Either way works but the past-tense version fits better, especially with the second half of the sentence.
  There is also an entire paragraph that gets repeated in the first chapter. Another issue I noticed is the font seems to randomly change mid chapter. This could be an issue when you upload the chapter or something in the program you are using to write the story. I had a similar thing happen and it turned out that word had enabled styles as I was writing. It was only visible when it got uploaded to RR.
  All in all, not a bad story. My suggestion would be for the author to finish the writathon and go back over the early chapters to flesh out the story more.