incinerate

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As the universe was witnessing a celestial event, a sword was being forged. Infused with rare, mystical materials to ensure the blade was indestructible, it would later gain the name Bloodshed and be known as a sword that could cut anything no matter what. As time passed many people existed wielding Bloodshed but all would share the same fate, they would die and pass the sword to someone else or leave it behind, destined to fall into the hands of another. Existence was cruel, unity never existed and many races fought each other to their deaths, living in this universe is suicide no matter who you are, everyone is cursed to fight however there exists those that attempt to change the course and fate of everyone In existence, from a world of people slowly burning into sacrifices within a dying universe.

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2022
Author: Godkiller379

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 10
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Chapters(40 total)

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Someone in a hatRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Incinerate is a striking dark fantasy saga that immerses readers in a world teetering on the edge of chaos, masterfully interweaving themes of revenge, legacy, sacrifice, and fractured unity. What begins as a tale of idealism and hope transforms into a gripping account of bloodshed and redemption, cantered around its unforgettable protagonist, Mephistopheles. The story is powerful in its delivery, unwavering in its momentum, and uncompromising in its depiction of war, loyalty, and betrayal.
At the core of this story is Mephistopheles, whose evolution from a traumatized eight-year-old boy into a hardened warrior on a quest for justice is both compelling and emotionally resonant. His character arc is painted with vivid brushstrokes of grief, determination, and moral complexity. Through his eyes, readers explore the psychological scars of witnessing the death of a father figure, the legendary Ultimate Bloodshed User, and the crushing weight of inherited legacy. Mephistopheles is not merely a sword-wielding avenger; he is the embodiment of unresolved trauma, righteous fury, and enduring resolve.
Balisarda Sumernor, the enigmatic antagonist, is brilliantly layered. Initially portrayed as the traitor who ended an era of peace, Balisarda's character pulses with silent menace and commanding presence. Despite his villainous role, his poise, intelligence, and calculated leadership make him a formidable presence. His relationship with the deceased Bloodshed User adds layers of tension, especially as Mephistopheles attempts to untangle the mystery behind his father's death.
Supporting characters such as Jabari, the iron-willed commander, and Chris, the idealistic and curious martial artist, offer excellent contrast to Mephistopheles. Jabari's interaction with Mephistopheles in the military camp showcases a battle of ideologies between duty and personal vengeance. Chris's empathy and innocence serve as a mirror reflecting the cost of Mephistopheles' path. Each character is writt
alexlol88Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Character Development: I think this story has some of the best character development i've ever read. My personal favorite was the main character's Mephistopheles.
Favorite character: I really liked principal 6 because of how he scared everyone and the badass vibe he gave off.
Favorite moment: When Balisarda Sumernor showed off his sword summoning ability, that was really cool.
Matthew P CamachoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The description and detail are like a painter showing you the story taking place. The charters are fun and enjoyable. This is much love of the story and the willingness to polish the story my only issue (probably as I am old) is the many uses of font can stop the reader from a nice flow. I am guilty of using different fonts for dramatics and that is good but if a chapter had 4 different fonts in it on a digital device can pull reader if they have to readjust screen to read a single sentence in a chapter. This look like it would have worked good in a printed form. The only other thing is the centering it can cause some eyes not to flow across as well. But the story is very strong and dynamic with the forces at play.
Shadows of fantasyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Spoilers for up to chapter 7 (if you read my review that far)
Chapter 1 overview-
Chapter one was great, it hooks you in, and the story is nice. Grammar is fine, although some people might not like the middle alignment of your chapters, but that's fine if you have it like you do now, people won’t care. The story is very easy to see what you are going for, and who the main enemy is. Your style is engaging, I love how you take the time to describe the camp and its worn torn ness, the frayed edges and the people's injuries, as well as their mental states. Character however at the end gets a bit worse. When Mephistopheles encounters Chris, is seems a bit unnatural for him to share his life story (Maybe give us an insight into why he does this, and it may feel more natural) But otherwise the people are good, the fight at the camp between Mephistopheles and Jabari shows us just how Mephistopheles feels about Jabari and his position in the war.
Chapter 2 overview-
The ending to Chris and Mephistopheles talk is really in character for Mephis (I’m sorry if this isn’t how you would shorten it) and it makes him feel like a brooding, war torn and angry protagonist. The next pov really draws in questions, who are the Principals, and why is Aham number 5? What does that mean, is five high or low, and does this have any importance in Balisarda’s army. Aham and Bismarck's argument shows the duality of this world, the people who think that bloodshed and war is the only option, and people who think that peace could also be an option. Not only that, but if Bismark is Principal Seven does that mean he is above or below Balisarda? All questions I hope will be answered in time. I loved the way you described the clanking of the armour, and the heaviness of his sword. It clearly shows us what he’s feeling, and what path he’s chosen in life. Their Majesty's castle? Does this mean Balisarda isn’t a lord, but a king to them? I love how when Mephis is fighting the enemies, he doesn't just see
maxtlionRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
There is a distinct Manga feel to this dark slayer story, which the author unapologetically leans into with great effect. The description of sounds, emotions and expressions really gives you a feel for the conditions and events as it progresses.
There is a consistency to the pace and flow of the story which works well, though occasionally reducing the dramatic impact of a particular line with additional context and detail. In general, the story flows well and fits together logically.
The Manga feel is most evident in the battle sequences, with fantastic abilities, superhuman acts and it revels in the visceral side of combat, as our hero (maybe?) displays a level of savage ruthlessness to those standing in his way. The description of each strike is crafted to evoke the maximum impact and awareness of the trauma they cause. Blood and guts abound.
The world building is localised in the early chapters, but you’re given a vivid picture of the conditions that characters operate in, the impact of their actions and – in many cases – the excruciating detail of how they meet their grisly demise.
There are points of improvement which would take this story up a notch. The grammar in some places would benefit from further editing and structure. Particularly early on, there are unexplained events which left me wondering how they had occurred, unexplained changes in position, reasons for actions taken etc. There are some inconsistencies in writing style - which as an editor stand out for me - but in practice probably won’t bother readers much.
Fans of action and carnage will lap this up and come back for more!
KedikRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
First off, I have to say that I really love the premise of your story. The concept of 8-year-old Mephistopheles starting a quest for vengeance for his fallen father is a fantastic hook. The overall vibe and atmosphere you've created are very fitting for this kind of tale. Which I really liked
As I was reading, there were a few small points that I felt could make the story even stronger. Occasionally, I found the narrative a bit hard to follow; I believe a little more simplicity in some of the detailed explanations could help with the flow. I also noticed that the title "The ultimate Bloodshed user" is repeated quite often at the prologue. While I understand you might be keeping the father's name a secret, using a shorter title or a pronoun sometimes might help the sentences feel smoother. Lastly, some of the dialogues felt a bit disconnected, as if the characters were just throwing their opinion to each other rather than talking. The reason for the main character telling about his father to Chris, in particular, wasn't immediately clear to me. Maybe he wanted to explain the reason for his revenge there, or maybe he wanted to leave someone behind who knew about it because he believed he wouldn't be able to return alive, but it still felt out of character to me.
The way you expressed the brutality of the battle scenes was very powerful, but the excessive detail made it difficult for the reader. The fight with Aham was tense and its good their fighting techniques etc. really make you feel their strength and are weight.
Overall, you have a really strong foundation here. The core idea is compelling, and Mephistopheles is a protagonist that feels like a mix of guts and Darth Vader. Which is great.
DavidAlanKingWTFRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Advanced Review of Incinerate (Chapters 1–10)
Well, what a ride this has been so far. Up to chapter 10, Incinerate is already proving itself a furious clash of swords, wills, and worlds, the sort of tale that does not so much walk onto the stage as burst through the curtains wielding a flaming katana while shouting the name of its own attack. It is intense, unrelenting, and yet carries beneath all the carnage a surprisingly thoughtful core about justice, loyalty, and the terrifying cost of vengeance.
Style 4 / 5
The style is thunderous, lyrical, and absolutely drenched in atmosphere. At its best, it sings like steel through air, mixing ritualistic combat detail with flashes of strange poetry. The imagery of blue fire dragons, blood-soaked battlefields, and even the quieter candlelit exchanges has real weight. There is a theatricality to the prose, as though the book knows it is standing on a cosmic stage and relishes the performance. Occasionally the descriptions linger a touch too long, which can stall momentum when the reader is desperate to know who will land the next blow, but the voice is bold and confident, and that ambition carries it.
Story 4 / 5
The story so far is not simple sword-and-sorcery. It is a knot of betrayal, vengeance, and the burden of titles. The duel between Aham and Mephistopheles is not just blade against blade, but soul against soul. Interwoven with this are shadows of greater powers, looming names like Balisarda Sumernor who seem to cast storms over every page. What works especially well is that the world feels bigger than the immediate fight. You can taste the politics and smell the treachery even when the swords are clashing. That said, the pacing sometimes tips toward repetition in the combat sequences, when the same ground is hammered again and again. Yet by chapter 10, the stage is firmly set, the stakes are sky-high, and the promise of what is to come has its hooks in deep.
Grammar 4 / 5
Technically the writing is solid, though oc
Lord Turtle the firstRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Some spoilers ahead.
Incinerate opens with ambition—a warrior named Mephistopheles marching alone toward a fortress to avenge his father, the "Ultimate Bloodshed User" who once united all races before betrayal shattered that peace. The premise carries weight: a lone man carrying a legendary sword against an army of 100,000, driven by memories of watching his father murdered when he was eight years old.
The story wants to be epic. It wants Mephistopheles to feel like an unstoppable force of vengeance, cutting through soldiers with brutal efficiency while commanders debate strategy in candlelit chambers. There are moments where this vision comes through—the camp scene establishes genuine tension, and the worldbuilding hints at a complex history of racial conflict and fragile unity.
However, the execution struggles to match the ambition. The combat sequences, while attempting visceral impact, become repetitive and overwrought. The prose frequently tells rather than shows, and the pacing lurches between extended dialogue scenes and lengthy battle descriptions that blur together. The author has clearly revised these chapters (as noted in the author's notes), and the effort shows improvement, but fundamental structural issues remain.
For readers who enjoy dark fantasy with revenge-driven protagonists and don't mind rough prose, there's a story worth following here. The core concept is solid, and the author's commitment to improvement is evident.
Style:
The prose in Incinerate reaches for grandeur but often overshoots into purple territory. Passages like "The stench of the camp was one of sour sweat and rot, some noxious concoction that gagged the back of the throat with each breath" work effectively, but too many sentences stack adjectives until meaning drowns in description.
Combat sequences suffer from repetition. Mephistopheles kills soldier after soldier, but each death is described with similar language—blood sprays, bones crack, bodies crumple. By the third chapter,