In Naruto With Gamer System

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Description

A man that never found his purpose in life even at his last moments in his deathbed with his family surrounding him, he still felt an emptiness in his heart, and with deep regrets, he finally closed his eyes for one last time.. or so he thought...

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Bakorio

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.4/ 5.0
Followers: 413
Views: 965,483

Chapters(299 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

KEANU-SAMARoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
THX BRO PLEASE CONTINUE 👍💜🔥
I really like this novel and I hope you don't stop even if you reach Boruto 💪💜👍
I really want to see how Bakorio develops and I want to see him in Boruto and fight the Kara organization 🔥
So please continue 💜
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Martin Alvara Jr.Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The best uchiha to ever live stronger than Madera uchiha the gamer 😎 he's a true ninja able to fight tailed beast alone 👏 its awesome his shuriken skills are better than itachis please continue to update or are you dropping the story??? I hope you don't ,.', sharingan I tried to make one here didn't work out
RandoUserRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I personally enjoyed this very much. It elaborates on stuff pretty well so even if you haven't watched naruto or watched it a long time ago (Like me), you still understand how everything works. My only criticism would be that it felt kinda boring until the part where the war starts. That's when the story takes a left turn and I love it.
SyvaRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
First of all I have to say that I'm a huge fan of LitRPG styled Fan Fictions.
The story is a fresh take on how much impact an isekai'ed OC can shake up the Naruto-verse. Many events are new and a creative consequence of past choices. I gave 4 stars on Story simply because it's good but some events could've been interesting to dive a bit deeper into. I also would like to see more of the system then is shown right now, but that is only my personal preference and not in any way a fault of the author. Other people are sure to appreciate that the focus is not primarily on system progression but on story progression.
The characters are good but they seem to lack some depth. This seems to be because of the short character interactions, which tend to only contain the purpose of the conversation and not some random topics or any wit or jokes.
The style and grammar are fine as it's visible that this your first story. The writing style and grammar needs a good bit of work but it is getting better as the story progresses. This website is exactly for authors like you who wanna start writing and improve so continue your good work, I'm looking forward to it.
P.S. You could maybe look for someone to read over your chapters pre-publishing to fix some grammar issues.
TheManyRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I found it a bit difficult to read the story. While I could follow along surprisingly well the thought processes and motivations of the protagonist, which was a pleasant surprise, it feels like there were a lot of parts left out. The flow felt pretty choppy, though still leagues better than my attempts at coming of with dialogue admittedly. The system portions feel tacked on or perhaps that they don't have a strong frame of context to compare/contrast against.
Needs a few rough edges in pacing to be smoothed out, and perhaps some extrapolation/exposition to clear up the System elements.
Clockwork OrangeRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Up until the uchiha massacre is stopped the story is pretty good, but the MC gets too strong too quick and there's a few plot elements that don't really make sense.
Not once has a single person questioned why this 5 year old is so intelligent and talented, and none of the other characters really act like they did in the real series.
pewpewcachooRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Honestly this fan fic is okay. It needs work to make it better. I actually read this on another site, then checked it out here. As it goes the story is okay, there are some plot points that could be fixed. The writing it self needs work. It's hard to read sometimes along with the grammar. It all needs work or a good editor.
MimeomiaRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Dropped at ch.14. 5 year old talking about things he shouldn't know like root and danzo and no one think's its weird, even better, let's ask him for advice, we all know how smart 5 year old kids are, nothing strange here.
"I am sorry Kushina let just hope Bakorio-kun can really help make new bodies for us so we can take care of Naruto properly". Main character is still 5 years old.
Willing suspension of disbelief has a limit and this is mine
VTonicRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
Very sad to see someone drop the ball this hard.
no backstory for the mc
mc goes from civilian to jonin in a week
no one questions his intelligence
very unrealistic reactions from other characters. Powerful adults from naruto submit to the mc wi the out much thought.
character blatantly manipulates everyone he is met and fails to establish meaningful connection
oridesuRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
Its a shame cause it started off good and could have been real intresting but it comes off as rushed, like the writer wanted to tell his own story but wants to get the whole events of naruto out the way before he can do so, and inorder to do so he basicly made a 5 year old God to controle everything going on, honestly if you gave the MC a harem hed just be a generic self-insert iskei protag atm and i hate to say that about any story but thats what it comes out as atm.