How do I break My Limits?

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Description

Starting a new high school I tried to lay low, I tried to stay out of trouble.

Thats when I met him,The Old man, why is he so mysterious.

Who knows? but why is he a pain in the ass? He smokes,he drinks to much and goes on about how he once ruled the world, something about him is off?

I get a feeling that under this Old mans persona lies a ferocious Tiger...

Please help me...

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2021
Author
Raizen2206

Tags

ACTIONTRAGEDYDRAMAMARTIAL ARTSROMANCE SUBPLOTSCHOOL LIFESTRONG LEADMALE LEADURBAN FANTASYPROGRESSIONWUXIA

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Rating
3.4/ 5.0
Followers
11
Views
8,233

Chapters(30 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • Mister J.Royal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    I like the flow of the story.
    Laughed a bit at the funny parts. I really loved the fighting. Not so much the other stuff.
    But for the love of god. Don't put like six "," into one sentence. Making it be like 10~20% of a whole chapter ^^.
    I feel like I make them to long. All the time. As I really like to add on some more words, with all the fluff and puff, to really explain stuff. And maybe those insights in between. Try to show more and tell less. It helped me cut down on those evil-god-word-chain-snakes.
    Now that i am writing stuff down to get my grammar and a few other aspects rust free. I really notice those easy to fix mistakes.
    Here's a few easy fixes:
    - Break up your sentence more often. Max two "," in one sentence.
    - weir(e)d << small spelling mistakes. I found myself doing allot of those for the first 10~12k words i wrote. After like .... 1 year of not writing anything in english. Outside work related stuff. I eat "h" often out of words ... but it's fixed now for me. Hopefully... But an example for that word i mentioned= If " it's weirder, then weird. It's wild, crazy, enormously confusing and so on."
    Ps: If you need a word processor program. Word has a free online version. After I check my stuff personally. I now always paste it into there. And see if there's obvious stuff I missed. Most times it's just small things. But they add up.