Horned Sage

Self-Published

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Description

In a world ruled by power and magic, the tale of a resilient faun unfolds, defying the odds and emerging as a Horned Sage.

As the realms of religion, science, and culture advance, his journey is a testament to the enduring spirit of creatures who fight to reclaim their place in a world that has denied their existence. Join him in a mesmerizing odyssey through a realm where forgotten wonders and hidden powers await, and one creature's rise to greatness becomes a beacon of hope for all who have been dismissed and overlooked.

Jordan was a young executive who died trying to protect a stranger. Reborn in a different reality as a faun, he tries to mend his past deeds while living an incredible journey.

What can you expect fromHorned Sage?

✴LitRPG with a systematical progression

✴Slow burner, easy to read.

✴World-building

✴ Religion and Noble power struggles

✴Creatures from legends, mythology, folklore, and more

✴Publishing schedule: Saturdays 3 p.m. GMT -3h

✴ Support on Patreon and get 2x chapters a week.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: laltopia

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 863
Views: 264,549

Chapters(82 total)

Reviews

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Community Reviews(10)

KacperCRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
In my opinion, it's a good story. The narrative is interesting, and the grammar is good. I didn't read a story with a faun as the MC yet and find it interesting too. I like that the MC starts at the bottom, and I am excited to see his growth. I recommend giving it a try if you like LitRPG stories.
Lucian T. EinarRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall: Horned Sage holds a nice plot, but its format leaves room for improvement. While it reads more like a script, the potential for a richer narrative is there. Don't be disheartened by critics; every writer faces challenges, and with some refinement, this story could shine.
Style: The storytelling format, resembling a script, may not fully reflect the author's intentions. However, the groundwork for a compelling narrative is laid out. With some adjustments, and using a 'show, don't tell' narrative this story has the potential to engage readers on a deeper level.
Story: The core plot of Horned Sage is interesting. It's clear that the author has good intentions and knows what they want, although they're still trying to find their footing. The challenge lies in the presentation, particularly the dialogue.
Grammar: The grammar and language used in the story are areas where improvement is needed. The dialogue could benefit from more refined wording and structure to elevate the overall reading experience. I didn't find many grammatical errors per se although I'm not particularly good at that.
Character: While the characters' interactions are presented in a script-like manner, there's still the opportunity to delve deeper into their personalities and relationships. With some narrative enhancements, these characters could become more engaging and relatable.
In conclusion, Horned Sage is a diamond in the rough. The potential for a compelling story is evident in its plot, but it requires some polishing to truly shine. The author should take heart and consider refining the narrative format and dialogue to make the story more engaging. As a reader, I'll be keeping an eye on this story, hoping to see it transform into something even more captivating in the future. Don't be discouraged; writing is a journey of growth and improvement.
To your credit, when I started my writing was a total mess, to say the least, it was horrible.
Ashen CoreRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
realy like the pace of the story and the character building (side and main)
but what realy makes the story shine is that there is a very good balance in the progress of prowess of the main character and the story, world building and progresses at a logical but not to slow pace a which i realy enjoy.
P.S.
also love that he is a goat hadn't seen that one before peronally
gomamonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Horned Sage has a very concise, clear way of storytelling which is kind of refreshing when compared to some other LitRPG stories, which tend to overuse flowery language to the point it's hard to understand anything. It takes it's time setting up important parts of the worldbuilding and settles into the LitRPG aspect slower than most stories, so it has a slower start compared to other stories, but I think the slow pace of the story is written well. Overall, it has an intriguing plot, well thought out worldbuilding, and a distinct method of storytelling, and I can't wait to see where the story goes!
Kia LeepRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall: 4.5/5
I really love the premise of this story, as I myself enjoy reading non-human MCs, and I haven't read a satyr MC before. It starts with the character reborn as a baby and doesn't skip much over the childhood, so there's a lot of Bryn learning how to interact with the world---including learning their language, which was an interesting take I don't often see. Unfortunately the pacing dragged as a result for me in the early chapters, although as soon as he went through the "ritual" and finally got access to this world's System (around ch 7 I believe) my interest started to pick up again.
Style: 4/5
Previously the story had been written in a "script" like format with all character actions and prose stripped out, which resulted in a "floating head" syndrome. However, the author has been very receptive to feedback when readers have spoken up over disliking the format, and he's worked very hard to comb through old chapters and fix the style. So that's awesome!
Story: 4.5/5
As I mentioned before it's a bit of a slow burn, but I like the direction it's headed in, and the magic system intrigues me. There's also clearly been some thought put into how the world (socially and politically) interact with the magic system, which is a good indication of worldbuilding.
Grammar: 4/5
There's a lot of grammar problems, and that's fair given the author says English is not their first language, but they are good about fixing typos as they are caught. It seems about on par for typical grammar in RR stories.
Characters: 4.5/5
I'm definitely interested to see how things develop with Bryn, and the author sure knows how to make us hate the racist Lady of the house! I wish it went a little deeper than that, however, as the racism feels very superficial and I struggled to find depth in any of the side characters. That said, Byrn is a strong and intriguing enough character to drive the story on his own.
Schatt BatsuRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Well, let's begin! Excuse any mistake, english is my third language.
From the beggining, I noticed the story is quite amateurish in writing, which is not a problem for me, everyone starts from somewhere, but could be a dealbreaker for many other people who don't like the following:
- Semi-unrealistic dialogues.
- Cartoonishly evil villains.
- Weird choices about lenght of text, sometimes too small/too big.
- And, of course, some grammar mistakes sprinkled over it.
Still better than anything on wattpad, that's for sure! It's quite fun to read nonetheless, and the writing could be worse.
The story seems to be at least a little interactive seeing that we got a poll about how to proceed with the main character, Bryn, progression speed, which is a pretty good thing in my books. It's good to interact with the audience, and the author does listen and respond to the comments by what I saw.
The story itself is quite generic, but generic does not mean bad. The MC is always very determined, although I do think that he could use his earth knowlodge for more interesting things (maybe miss it in some capacity or have more of those dreams where he interacted with his parents? Maybe recall situations and miss home? Maybe question why he even was reincarnated? To be seen.)
Overall, it's a fun adventure to follow, and rooting for the MC is rewarding. The grammar and structure of the text could use some work but it's not awful or unreadable, just annoying, the story is generic but it's still on early stages and could always change. It's always worth to support authors, so if you are interested, go ahead and give it a shot!
Turpin2002Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Decent story pacing and characters with some clearly defined alignments but, a few grammar mistakes that you might need to reread once or twice to get the full idea of what's being said and I am not really a fan of the text box style for the levels and prefer a more straight forward list.
Overall an easy ready so far and I look forward to seeing where it goes.
wait a minuteRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I want to start off by saying thank you author for keeping up the good work, and I know English is not your first language.
The story has promise, for sure. It's a good idea, just needs a lot of polishing.
I will be more than happy to up my rating in the future, but right now I believe it's accurate.
The grammar is not good. It has been getting better in the newest chapters, but my edit suggestions are about the length of a full chapter themselves.
To be honest, at first the characters were good. Since we have met many new people though, it feels as if they have meshed together. Everyone talks the same, no one has their own personality because everyone has the same personality. The difference? The blacksmith dude likes blacksmithing and there's a child that's obsessed with the cat girl.
Despite this, the story has a lot of promise. We have a goal, we have the supporting cast... now we just need the MC to actually get stronger. I'm at chapter 29 and Bryn is still level 1. I get the whole skill grind and all that, but he's not learning anything. All he's done is create skills himself except for the one outlier, sword mastery. The author has surrounded him with high level individuals who are willing to train him, but he's not ever getting trained. The opposite is happening, actually. Bryn is training them? Funny and cute, sure, but when is MC going to get stronger? His goal has been thrown out the window currently, I guess he doesn't want to see his parents again? If that is still his goal, he needs to actually start working towards it. He's made so many deals to be taught skills, but he hasn't been on the receiving end of those deals. It's really aggravating.
The only reasons I have not dropped this is because I see promise in it and want to help the author get there. This is the only story I have done edit suggestions on ever, normally if the grammar is this bad I would just drop. But, they're working on it and clearly care, so I'll stick with it.
It's worth giving
EnahsRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The first like 40 chapters are good and I liked the direction it was going but at some point after idk if the author got tired or something but it stopped being a litrpg. They still talk about levels and maybe getting a skill or title but literally stop all skill progression or anything like that and it's all dialogue or story and it's fine but I feel like you need the skill progression when he goes through 30 chapters worth of training and it doesn't tell us anything about his skills being leveled up.
saba_86Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
A cynical, cost-cutting healthcare executive, haunted by his role in a system that failed his own parents, gets a second chance in a fantasy world. That's a fantastic, emotionally charged premise. The potential for him to use his ruthless administrative skills for good in a new context is huge.
This is the biggest issue. The writing is very rough. It's filled with grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and sentences that are confusing or don't make logical sense.
"I got challenged and improved every day" -> This should be in third person: "He was challenged and improved every day..."
"The hospital didn't have the proper infrastructure to hold so many patients. The protocols were loose and obsolete. Overworked employees make many mistakes. The sad reality about many institutions in the healthcare system." -> This is a series of statements, not a narrative. It tells us everything and shows us nothing.
The story spends too long on a vague, tell-y backstory and then rushes through the most interesting parts. The mugging and stabbing happen very quickly and feel like a mere plot device to get him isekai'd. The emotional impact of his death is minimal because we don't have a strong connection to him yet.
Right now, the execution isn't doing that idea justice. But with a heavy revision focused on prose quality, "showing," and pacing, this could easily become a very engaging and unique isekai story. The core is there; it just needs a lot of work to shine.