Hollow Dungeon

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Hiatus

Author

Nublies

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• FrogenRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Honestly it feels like it had some potentiol to be pretty good the problem though is the pov it keeps jumping around which isnt bad in of itself but i cant tell how anything thats been mentioned connects to each other not only that but it dosent feel like theses different events will meet into satasfying conclusion for the first arc and that they happened years apart like how they mention it from outside the dungeon pov and it sounds like the dungeon was built years ago but from the dungeon pov it hasn't even figured  how to make a living worm much less a monster or any type of trap then you have the fact that even without the weird unintended time distortion the story gives the events themselves feel like their from  seperate arcs like the beginning of the first arc the middle of the third arc and the end of the second arc all together it feel like you have to know something thats already happened with no idea of what it was nor does it feel like it will be explained at any point and it just seem like the author created the three different groups to better  build the world problem is hasnt really done that and instead the story become a game of twenty question about what this different groups have anything to do with each other and the devolement of the story so honestly it has a good founding start of a confused dungeon but the author proably should of worked one group at a time and establishing the dungeon its conection to the world before trying to juggle eight diffrent thing at the same time so best of luck you can make this a great story just needs to be reworked a bit