Himemonogatari

Self-Published

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Description

**gonna rewrite this evenutally

Life sucked and it wasn't getting any better for anyone. People lived in a grey world and reveled in their sorrow. Though they could move their hands they never sought to change their circumstance around. Made worse was underlying shadows creeping under the world's feet. If no one was going to act then the Protagonist would as a protagonist should. Taking the role as the world's savior, a hero of light, the protagonist would be followed by a party of like minded individuals rejected by society for choosing to paint the world in color rather than grey. Kindness and compassion was the solution, or so it should be. This was not only their new beginnings but also their new ends.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Kinografy

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Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 4
Views: 5,694

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Community Reviews(1)

ScruffedUpRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
While the story is entertaining to an extent, I believe the formatting at the start hurts the reading experience more than most would realize.
Style/Story:
While I can't really comment on the theme or much of the style or story with how early the story is I can say that both are following a decent path so far. We have our motives set, enemies ready, and the starting gun has fired. Time will tell how the story will pan out, but I will do my best to give constructive criticism for the future.
Saying that however, I do feel like a couple of the chapters are filled to the brim with blocks of texts. A lot of the chapters feel crowded almost, and while this doesn't take all that much out of the reading of the story it does make the chapters look and feel shorter, hell one of them felt so short I actually copy-pasted it into docs to see what the word count was. It feels like a 1.5k worded chapter when in reality it's 3k, personal thing mostly but I figured I would state it.
So far so good, time will tell if everything turns out good.
Character:
The characters are in there infancies, and as such theres only so much I can say about them, but they all have their personalities so far and none of them feel 'cookie cutter' as of yet, which is a good thing this early on. 5/5
Grammar:
I have yet to notice any grammar issues, and as such I can't really comment on the grammar score. However, being a review based on my personal feelings i'd be kinda disingenuous if I didn't mention that I kind of find the effects of "~snore~" kind of off putting, while this might be a comedy effect it always feels off to me. However thats a personal issue and as such doesn't effect my score. 5/5
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Overall, the book is decent so far. With some small edits here and there to remove the blocky feel some of the chapters have I think the book has potential, as well as the custom ----- line breaks which I appreciate. Always appreciate the smallest amount of extra effort, not matter how little it actually