Hero Of Harmony

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Description

One may think that in order to be a Hero you must have a pure soul, and untainted heart, but in reality such a thing is impossible; now one's soul is pure, nor is anyone's heart untainted, Gods aren't even exempt from this rule. No, a True Hero is someone who knows they have an impure soul and tainted heart, yet they embrace it, instead of attempting to deny their very nature; however, not all True Heros are the same, some have different beliefs and/or ideals. Yet at the end of the day, no matter how terrible or bleak the situation looks, you can always count on a True Hero to act as a beacon of light that'll show you the correct path, but for you to take, you must embark on it yourself.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Ozonelayer

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Rating: 3.6/ 5.0
Followers: 126
Views: 204,162

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InsufferableAnonRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
This story is...well it's needs work, and a lot of it.
Style: The style is, well it's slop. It's workable slop but there are issues everywhere.
It's almost exclusively tell with very little show. Its Exposition dump galore while being terrible and ham-fisted.
It's not written naturally or even well written period within the context of the story. You can tell the author had other priorities and put very little effort into how to present it to the reader naturally.
The syntax needs to be looked at as well and tightened up. There is a whole lot of words being used and very little to show for it. It really should be more concise. Its very sloppy. This and character problems are what really brings this story down.
Grammar: It's ok. There are issue but it's readable without errors or problems everywhere.
Story: The story itself conceptually seems fine, interesting even. Unfortunately the execution from the just about everything else mean that whatever could have been there is hidden.
Character: This is where it truly starts to go wrong. Characters can make or break a story. And there are issues, a lot of them.
We are told in the beginning of the story that mc is reincarnated after dying at 22 years old. So while I don't expect him to act like a guy with 3 kids and responsibilities. I do expect him to act like a semi reasonable adult. That does not happen. What we get is somebody who is acting and talking like a child. Maybe a slightly wiser child then his body's age would indicate but still a child. Not an adult at all. If I wasn't specifically told otherwise in the first couple chapters that he is supposedly in his mid 20's then his internal monologue would lead me to believe he's 10 to 12 years at best.
The 2nd charter that is introduced is suppose to be a few thousand years old and is the mc caretaker. she explains and treats the mc like a child as well, even after knowing and verbally acknowledging that he is reincarnated. Their conversions and actions with each ot