Heller: (old version)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

entityUNKNOWN

• Notice regarding rewrite and book 3
  Apr 6, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• First manga gamerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Strarted reading this and loving it!!!!! Put more status screen
• dragonheart90Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  the story it's  intresting, the characters are very funny and characterized,  expecially i like the different approach for the cultivation of their power. Anyway the humor is greate.
• JungleBunny8Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I was pretty surprised that this hadn’t exploded a few days ago! Especially because the author has been really fast with updates.
  But I think the reason is because the first two chapters happen in the real world before the characters die. This probably turned a lot of readers away but it shouldn’t have. Keep reading!
  Style:
  I really like the perspective brought by the character as well as the writing style. It’s refreshing and really helps keep the story flow exciting to read!
  Story:
  So far it seems like it hits on all the things I love on RRL but done in a new way. I like it a lot so far!
  Grammar:
  The sentences are a lot longer than I am used to especially on RRL. But I like it and I think writers like Steven King write like that.
  The author has room to improve in the way it flows maybe but that is why ppl post here, right?
  I like the way it reads a lot.
  Character:
  Interesting and detailed characters that are really brought to life!
  Read this fiction!  The author probably made a mistake putting the first parts on a plan here on RRL but it gets really interesting after that!
  To the author: Keep writing please!
• AmbushRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  As a newbie author, I know the challenges someone would face, but there are very few complaints I can pin point besides basic, commonplace errors.
  Style: While the excerpts in parenthesis do seem redundant as it is a first person view, where almost everything can be taken as what comes from the MC Heller's mind; they do not detract from the story in any major fashion. Other minor slips in finding your 'style' seemed to appear with the differing levels of passive voice, but all are well within respectable levels. Definitely an enjoyable read!
  Story: I loved it, there is a nice pace and even if people assume it to be slow, looking at the word count it definitely reasonable. I would suggest combining chapters for an average word count of roughly 2k, but as the author it is entirely up to you. Realistically it is just another button to press so I can't complain.
  Grammar: Steadily improving from what I've read. Writing is hard. That much most people will understand and tend to more lenient about. No blaring issues that'd stop me from reading.
  Character: I like Heller a lot. Tends to be 'softer' than most MC's , but that is a nice change of pace. I just want to see more Wolfram/Mike/Chaos Incarnate (I forgot his Earth name) maybe a side chapter every five or six ones you release instead of having him as a novelty as he stands at the moment. Either way, it won't stop me from reading.
  But, seriously screw you. Now I have to reformat my story after reading yours. Readability is significantly better than what I'm used to.
  Solid read, but throw a bit more thought in descriptions if possible. Not people; places, things, cultures. Why is the blacksmith scene a taboo, etc. Don't be scared to throw a little wall of text if it's necessary to accurately portray what's floating around in your head. Truthfully, I referring more towards cultural aspects as I haven't met much of it and your story has an insane potential to be a leader in that regard.
  All the best, Ambush.
• AziroFFRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  small paced story and small chapters....the rest is oke, thats the only reason i'm not giving 5 stars
• FourgettingRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I like it.   If there are plot holes, they're not really too noticeable. Just the right amount of details - in most reincarnation stories, the part in between lives is almost always rushed with little to no detail,  the conversation is always rushed (example: the supreme deity, whatever they may be, simply like the MC for no reason or a negligible reason),  and the MC always gets a bonus/advantage in their new life for stupid/little to no reason.
  Not the case here.  The reasons are well-thought out, the conversation actually makes sense, and even the karmic system, the reason they get their advantage(s), is balanced in that it counts every little detail that works both for and against the protagonist.  Props, bro.
  And the MC doesn't just happen to magically understand science that he shouldn't have studied or had exposure to in years - what science he does know, he has a reason to know.  And he's not unrealistically clever, he simply does the best he can with what little he knows.
  Grammar is perfect (finally, I don't have to struggle to read!), story is decently paced, characters'.... well, character aren't unintelligible, and most of all:
  The author understands his own strengths and weaknesses. He uses his creativity well, and doesn't go out of his way to make humor that would end up being stupid and puerile at most.  It's just right.
  I'm leaving half a star for style because the boxes need to be better organized - though that's part of the story, the MC streamlining it himself.
  And half a star for character because we haven't seen completely what the character is like yet - romantically, how/if he gets flustered, etc.
  Chapters are a tad short, but workable. Keep up the good work
• ContesaRubiaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I have really been enjoying what has been written by far, but I have a really bad feeling that 'Mark/Wolfram' is going to get them both in a lot of trouble with his prejudiced attitude which may affect their 'KARMA' points, but as a whole Heller is really an enjoyable character to read about.
• RamennRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  it was good at first but the pace is too slow. it only talking about system and ability with no plot progression.
  chapter >23 and the mc is still a baby.
• dositheeRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Pretty weak characters, uses game mechanics which as always is a short cut that ruins fantasy almost 100% of time, little world outside of mc- all chacters 1 dim and borring.
• GopperRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  this novel is not bad; but its strangely silly... i really enjoyed the beginning, the grammar, and the "bromance" but the world development is awfulllllllllllll... theres a lot of situations where the MC can take a stand and in each one he pussies out; for petes sake hes the "Merricks" apprentice but even that apparently has no value
  i think for a feudalistic society, retardedness is natural but the  "discovery" of MC using cultivation arts was not clearly explained (i guess a vague accusation from a commoner that does not know cultivation arts?? )... the plot twists are not natural and silly (him blowing up the toads room, why would any leader put him in his own private room????)
  Look i hate to be brutal but this is the top ranked story for the month and i hate that after a promising start it just went to... Comedy is fine, tits are fine but its all forced and not flowing with MAJOR plot holes makes this an unattractive story to read... gl in the future