Heaven Trial
Self-Published
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Description
Year 2200 The First virtual reality game has out with time passing at year 2250 the first virtual reality game who truly stimulated a virtual world has out even before having two days before going out it taked 50 percent of all virtual reality games stock.A young man on his early twenties enter's this game but is he a normal young man ?Join him and his friend's on their story to conquer the game .--Guys this is my first story so it will have a lot of grammar porblem's I hope you will help me and I plan to make this story at least one hundred chapters long .--- A chapter will have from 1000 to 6000 characters or even more :D.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- AVL
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 2.8/ 5.0
- Followers
- 25
- Views
- 65,388
Chapters(13 total)
- Chapter 13 - The Lizard LordDec 30, 2015
- Chapter 12- A Pet And A DungeonDec 30, 2015
- Chapter 11 -The Grand Duel... or is it ?Dec 29, 2015
- Chapter 10-BarbariansDec 29, 2015
- Chapter 9 - Hidden Class !Dec 28, 2015
- Chapter 8 - The StudioDec 28, 2015
- Chapter 7 - AlchemyDec 28, 2015
- chapter 6-PKDec 28, 2015
- Chapter 5-Friend or Foes ?Dec 28, 2015
- Chapter 4-Phoenix CityDec 28, 2015
- Chapter 3-First Boss and Leaving the Newbie VillageDec 27, 2015
- Chapter 2- The Newbie VillageDec 27, 2015
- Creating the AvatarDec 27, 2015
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Community Reviews(3)
- LaughingStock001Royal Road★★★★★ 4.5Sorry, but I can't help it lol. It's not young boy bro, but a young man. Haha cause his already at his twenties.
- minimupp0702Royal Road★★ 2.0As you stated there are a lot of grammar mistakes. But even if one were to forget that then there are still several problems.
your sentences are losely put together so there is no real thread in the story.there are several plot holes. Like the fact that he just decides to make a combo, like it’s the easiest thing to do.the stoy is contradicting itself from the beginning. You say “there is still one day before the relase” in the beginning of character creation but then later directly after characer creation you say “Now the game will be relased on some second’s.”All in all the story is badly written with a lot of plot holes and contradiction not to mention thegrammar mistakes that you already knew were gonna be there. But it is a good start to begin from. All you can do is improve. - BlackMessiasRoyal Road★ 0.5This is not woth the time. Boring, bad grammar and so on. I hope this shit will stop soon....