Heaven on Earth

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Description

Rain. Silence. And everlasting clouds.A colorless world under a gray sky, with gigantic pillars, the so-called world pillars, jutting out of the land, only to disappear within the unmoving masses above.

Here, life is unbearable for those who ask too many questions.Which is especially true for Salome, a girl who had to endure numerous bad experiences because of her curious nature.When one day she meets a strange boy whose words challenge her entire worldview, Salome makes a decision that will change her life forever.For the world pillars, he claims, harbor a great secret.

This is the beginning of a journey.

In time, Salome will come to understand that there is far more to this world, this life – and to her – than she could have ever imagined.

The “sky” is the limit.

Welcome to my story!Hope you like my style, my ideas – and if you do, leave a comment to let me know :DThis is NOT a LitRPG. It's a character-driven adventure/progression story. If you like fantasy and you like people exploring an unknown world full of mysteries and danger, you'll enjoy this.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2025
Author: -Still-

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 4
Views: 4,569

Chapters(40 total)

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EdenCRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Heaven on Earth
The writing is poetic without slipping into purple prose, and the world feels heavy, soaked in isolation and quiet dread. From the prologue onward, the reader is immersed in a society weighed down by silence, taboo, and vague authority. The obelisks, the unspoken rules about the sky, and the ritualistic emptiness of daily life create an oppressive mood that lingers. Salome is a strong anchor for the narrative. She is introspective, restrained, and emotionally bruised in a way that feels believable. Her voice is consistent, and her inner conflict keeps the reader engaged.
However, the pacing across the first three chapters is sluggish. While the introspective style is elegant, it risks stalling momentum. Van’s entrance in Chapter 2 is strong, but Salome’s emotional shift in Chapter 3 from harsh rejection to reluctant ally happens too quickly and without sufficient grounding. His unexplained intrusion into her house also stretches believability. The emotional logic behind their connection needs more weight.
Chapter 4 shows noticeable improvement, offering a better dynamic between the leads and expanding the world’s scope. Still, the story hinges on one missing piece. Why Salome? Van approached others and was rejected. What makes her the one? Without answering that, the bond feels convenient rather than earned.
The prose is excellent. The tone is mature and immersive. With firmer emotional logic and better pacing, this could be something special. A gem indeed, just waiting to be polished.