Heaven and Hellfire Compiled

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William knew he shouldn't have taken that boat, but ambition can kick you in the teeth.Relma Artorious knew she should not listen at doors. But she is a girl with big ambitions and no intention of being less than her potential.

Abdul Sahshir knew he should not undertake that assassination on Tuor's mountain. Yet, with his life ending before it has begun, he has nothing to lose and everything to gain by glory.Three stories intertwine and shape the destiny of many more. But not all heroes are on the same side, and the shifting of dreams and destiny is a fickle one...

The compiled documentation of all my published stories on Royalroad. Read if you want to go all the way through to the end.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: WilliamGabriel10

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 193
Views: 298,090

Chapters(379 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

srwoodsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a pretty standard adventure story that takes place is a unique world filled with your typical fantasy races and monsters. The worldbuilding is great and I hope we get to see more of this world as the story progresses. This review may contain spoilers so read at your own risk.
Style: It’s written in the third person from the prospective of the protagonist for the most part with a few chapters here and there from other viewpoints. The pacing is good and the formatting makes it easy to read.
Story: Its your typical wide-eyed teenager goes on an adventure and learns about himself and the real world then makes some friends along the way kind of story. The author's world and side characters make the story a fun read and left me wondering what would happen next.
Grammar: I didn't find anything wrong with the grammar in this story.
Character: The protagonist is a slightly lazy teenage boy who is a noble. When he's offered the chance for adventure he jumps at it, as one does, and gets far more than he bargains for. Personally I didn't care for him all that much, nothing is wrong with him I just don't like that kind of character. Now the side characters on the other hand are in my opinion the best part of this story. There's a snarky servant, a strange goddess from a world far different than the one the story takes place in oh and she only visits during her dreams, and finally the demoness who's scheme drive the story. Their interactions with the protagonist drive this story and make it a good read. Also I've read to part two where we are introduced to yet another teenager that is about to go on an adventure. She seems more interesting than the first one.
So to wrap this up do I recommend this story. Absolutely its a fun quick read with plenty of action and worldbuilding.
CKJ5Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I hope people will keep in mind this review is based on only one chapter of the story: the Dreaming Goddess, and does not necessarily reflect the entirety of it. Okay, now that's out of the way, let’s get into it.
Pros:
The author does an excellent job setting up their world. We get a lot of world-building via conversations or thoughts related to conversations, helping to keep the reader engaged with the story while learning about the world. The pacing of the first chapter is decent. The author builds up to the meeting with the MC’s mother almost perfectly, which leads to William preparing to begin his adventure.
Cons:
There weren't many things for me to nitpick in chapter one, but I found the tone that the characters talked to each other odd. For example, William’s internal thoughts about his mother painted him as being terrified of her, but when they met, he aggressively challenged her. Another head-scratcher was William’s father, who wrote him a letter informing him that he was lazy. That alone was believable but had a PS at the end apologizing for his harsh words and explaining why he wrote them. I don’t know these characters very well yet, but their actions don’t line up with William’s internal thoughts.
Despite the author setting up the chapter well, the chapter felt that it was longer than it needed to be. If I were to make editing suggestions, I would have suggested trimming some of the story bits told after William received the letter from his father.
Overall:
Chapter one of the Dreaming Goddess is very well written and an excellent entry point to the story. The author doesn’t overwhelm the readers with world-building or lore but gives enough to make the reader curious about the world. Aside from the few tonal issues I had with the MC’s internal thoughts and character conversations, I thought this was a great first chapter that made such a good impression I would continue reading.
Eric VanderlipRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The Dreaming Goddess is the story of a young boy thrust into an epic fantasy adventure.
Style: A consistent perspective and smooth writing. No problems here.
Story: Conversation and events flow naturally. The world-building is fleshed out. If I had one criticism, it's that, halfway through chapter one (a long chapter), I was still quite confused where the story was headed. William had no notable ambition, and there was no apparent threat on the horizon.
I had to go back and read the blurb to get my answer: "Shipwrecked in Seathorius, the land of dreams, his only companion is his servant Felix".
Without that key bit of information to build anticipation, the beginning can seem slow. This is why disaster-driven fictions driven (like Shipwrecks) often open in the aftermath, and explain how it happened in a flashback. Without some way to hint at The Dreaming Goddess's interesting premise, readers like me who skip the blurb might find the beginning rudderless.
Reading further, perhaps Rusara could drop some hint about a life changing conversation after William returns from his training with Raynald. William might dismiss it, but it would pique a reader's interest. Just a idea.
Grammar: Near perfect. My need to edit went mostly unfufilled.
Character: Strongest element of The Dreaming Goddess. Many characters are horribly biggoted (and I mean that in a good way) with overbearing personalities. These flaws make them engaging and human.
Conclusion: Despite its slow start, I recommend The Dreaming Goddess because it is, frankly, very well written with engaging characters. That's why it's worth sticking around until the plot kicks in.
EythaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A fantasy setting with a reluctant hero, it's a deeply constructed world with a clear focus on world building. There is an entire pantheon of gods and an array of races and nations populating the world. If you're interested in a fleshed out setting this is a very good read.
For style, it is a straightforward third person story with nothing too surprising. It delivers the experience well, though early on it is a little heavy on exposition to introduce the world. Otherwise, it even outs taking a more natural pacing.
Nothing jumped out in terms of grammar, it read cleanly.
Only reaching chapter four, it was still early to gauge the story. But the journey had started by then with the inciting incident that sets William on his adventure. The goals remain unclear, but some new mysteries appear to pull the plot and reader forward.
There are a good selection of characters introduced already, though their long term presence remains unknown. William is a reluctant hero conflicted, yet curious which gives plenty of opportunities for growth and development. Apart from a little confusion in his actions, he is generally consistent along with the rest of the cast. Of the named key figures introduced, each have strong easy to identify personalities.
FirnielRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Within all honesty that I can manage this is a master stroke of genius. A nice blend of character development and world building helps with the relatively smart and brisk pacing. As someone who prefers to read at a slower pace this managed to permanently maintain my interest throughout the entire narrative
PizzaPizzaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So, first thing's first. This is a review swap, but the story has hooked me and I'll continue to try and chip through it with chapter-by-chapter feedback exchanged with the author. None of the other reviews have a really (imo) accurate take on the story thus far, and I'll try to sum it up succinctly.
With that said, the fundamental premise and worldbuilding are great, as is the cast of characters presented here.
The story follows William, and it has the appearance of a coming-of-age story for a reluctant hero protagonist. William was born to great heroes and champions of the realm, a shadow he can't step out of because he just wants to live life.
We have all our stock archetypes for a protagonist like this: An Amazon mother who is disappointed she got a son, his parents' companions in a swordmaster and mage. A snarky servant who serves as the straight man for the wallowing MC with an inferiority complex.
The prose and worldbuilding is presented in a very 'solid' high fantasy manner, and gives the impression of such until...well.
It starts becoming evident early on that this is an isekai story told from the perspective of a person living in the isekai world.
I've skipped ahead to peek at the later volumes, and I do have to talk about the true premise of the series. The eponymous Dreaming Goddess is an isekai protagonist, and the greater scope 'Big Good' of the series. She fades in and out of the world when she dreams, and has godly powers.
You learn pretty early on that a few cultures in this world are aware of her, and treat her as a deity. However, because she constantly fades in and out of the world itself, it's hard to anchor her as a protagonist.
I do have to talk about the points I docked off here for style though, because there's a reason why a lot of the reviewers (imo) never addressed this point.
There is a lot of heavy exposition in the first two chapters, and the chapter lengths very chunky for a serialization site like RR. These aren't dealbreakers for me
RezonanceRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The Dreaming Goddess is a great story filled with detailed descriptions and amazing characters that really breathes life into it. The MC must slowly learn and build himself to become the man he truly ought to be while learning more about himself and his ideals. This takes us on a journey of great character development and action that keeps the reader engaged and curious.
Character: Firstly, the character is developed perfectly. MC has an inferiority complex because he had not been able to hit his parent's goal for him. He feels weak and under pressure and he doesn't think he can do anything about it. This leads him to question and doubt himself when he speaks. With such a setup, the MC is bound to have lots of development which will fundamentally change how he views the world and is something I love in a good story.
Style: The high fantasy style portrayed in the book is executed perfectly. Different races of people are already introduced and developed which make the world feel big and complex.
Grammer: Grammer is impeccable. Very well-edited.
Story: Overall the story is beautifully written. The characters are well thought out and written. The dialogue makes sense. Combat is engaging and fun. Overall a great experience and I recommend it if you love character development and good storytelling.
TharsultRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The title covers my most positive opinion about this work so far -- I'm at about the 15-17k mark when writing this. The world feels HUGE right out the door, both in width (size) , depth (history), and complexity (People's, magics, etc.) At the time of this writing we have encountered 3 socio-political groups, four racial group (elves, dusk elves, humans, satyr's and minotaurs), a couple social classes, multiple classes, a couple political dynasties within one of the sociao-political groups, history back to when other races ruled things and the more immediate three generations of the mc's family, and a whole host of similar things. Merchant routes and goods would be the only thing not touched on yet. That is a huge plus for me.
The Characters are solid. Each has a distinct personality and goals (although the mc's goals are a bit muddied until the situation forces some on him). Each feels different than others. Each has interesting powers as well, or nearly each. Certainly an interesting role for each. I would say the dialogue occasionally feels forced or a touch stilted, the only reason I;m not raving about this positively like I am the world, but this is still a very solid category, easily 5 star.
The Story is rated highly--although i'm always weird rating story on a work that i'm not super deep into as I feel story comes through over a longer category. But for the read so far, very good. Clear impetus to the movements people are making, nice twists, etc. Cliffing well as well :) .
Grammer is fine. 1-2 mistakes but very little, FAR less than I accept in stories on kindle unlimited regularly.
Style is decent, but I guess this is the one area I'm not entirely enthused. I rate it a 5 still as it is way better than alot of what I happily read on KU, and I don't want to ding someone with a wine-swirling pretension when I know I love stories with worse style. But I would note two minor irritating trends--characters sometimes "appear" in a scene late, forcing me to mental
Ujwal VujjiniRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
While some of the chapter comments seem overly harsh, the author has done a fantastic job of merging the mythological with the fantastical! There's a great degree of world-building in the initial chapters and the stakes that are set for our heroes help to drive the story toward an epic journey.
Story: It starts off a little slow, but picks up quite quickly toward the end of the first chapter. William, the son of a duke, and his friend/servant Felix are thrust into a world inhabited with both friendly and deadly mythological creatures, prime of which so far are the Satyrs. The pacing stays steady, the action scenes are intense, and the narrative overall does a good job of holding my interest.
Style: We have standard third-person narration, though given from the perspective of William. We see the world through his thoughts and how they tint and may lead us astray at points to what may actually be happening. Some sentences read awkwardly but they are kept to a minimum.
Grammar: No issues here.
Character: William starts out as the reluctant type with unsure goals, but he decides early on to meet the challenge of setting out and seeing the world. Though some of his decisions are rash, and possibly ill-advised, I believe he'll quickly grow to become a character of great repute as the prologue sets him out to be.
There aren't too many stories out here that deal with the mythological past just name and stereotypical usage. To see another mythological epic fantasy on this site puts me in good company, and I hope to see more people give this story a shot!
damienrjamesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: The beginning parts were a bit choppy but it progressively got better. Sentences seemed thrown in between otherwise good flow and interrupted the reader experience. By the first chapter, it was much much better. I enjoyed the world building, the characters, and the MC’s inner conflict with his parents.
Story: Nice story telling if I can be honest. A lot of emotion, high stakes, consequences and space for character development.
Grammar: The weakest aspect of the writing, but a quick revision or two should rectify the issues. I would suggest reviewing the text and identifying any unnecessary words that can be removed while maintaining sentence clarity. This pulled me a bit from the story.
Character: The first chapter provided insight into the direction the story might take in terms of character development, which is promising. Side characters were great as well, and I find that each of them could have their own arcs, which is great for the overall feel of the story.
Because no one wants side characters that only push the plot or the MC along!
Overall, I liked the premise. There’s solid evidence of improvement for the writing style, and that means that the author is digesting the issues and implementing great fixes along the way. I’m a few chapters in but this piece shows a lot of promise!