He's The One™

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Iluvbloodandcookies

• Chapter 11: It Begins
  May 23, 2018
• Chapter 10: I Want Nothing To Do With You
  May 20, 2018
• Chapter 9: A Sick Kaia
  May 14, 2018
• Chapter 8: Don't Wait Up
  May 12, 2018
• Chapter 7: The First Time
  May 10, 2018
• Chapter 6: Secrets Told
  May 9, 2018
• Chapter 5: The Gala
  May 8, 2018
• Chapter 4: My husband is My Rival
  May 8, 2018
• Chapter 3: Wedding Night
  May 8, 2018
• Chapter 2: The Rules and The Marriage
  May 8, 2018
• Chapter 1: The Proposal!
  May 8, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• KittyWonderlandRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I love the story! I need an Alex in my life! @.@ I don't mean to sound creepish but I like your fluff scenes they're innocent yet detailed. I read where you filled in the story holes and I agree it made the story better. <3 Can't wait for more!
• God_is_GoodRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This is a fairly straightforward read, but very entertaining, full of unusual twists and a really unique set up.  The romance itself is very well crafted, the characters each have their own fun quirks and unusual traits, and the story as a whole is full of twists and a really crazy intriguing plot that grabbed me from the beginning and never let go.  A bit more research, however, is necessary.  As multiple people pointed out, a lot of your details didn't really fit in with the setting.  I think there's a lot of editting that needs to happen to make this flow smoothly and realistically.
• MoppsRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Before I begin a little disclaimer I don't really read romance/drama stories so this is just my first impressions of whats what
  Let's start with the things I liked, you did well to write in what's around the main character and what she is feeling. You did decent at painting a picture around you and setting the scene and such and I can really feel your enjoyment in your writing!
  Now some things I saw, first off is the realism of the story. First off from what I can tell by the story this is set in a city in either America or maybe europe (I mightve missed where), and not many cultures in the world still do the forced marriage thing and it just seems like in this plot it just seems like this just wouldn't happen and why is there a marriage with the jerk she is engaged too? (Maybe you will tell the audience why later but it was just something that struck out to me). Also with a headbutt, the main character seems like a smart girl who wouldn't needlessly go into fights and seems innocent. Even with the part of the skull where you headbut with hitting another person's skull with all your strength would make someone like the MC be at least a little dazed. Sorry if I seem to be nitpicking here but this is just an example of if you add details like in real life it could really bring your story to life!
  I like how you show how the character is really feeling and putting in little things like the blushing when they kiss at the marriage, like is she going to actually fall in love down the line? But the characters sometimes do some unrealistic decisions, the main character is a smart women who's also in the industry, a profession that requires critical thinking. I just don't really believe that she would just say yes without asking more questions, who the person is, what is their name, and how does he even know that she is being abused? Of course he could be watching her but the main character should question how he knew in the first place! Just something I noticed.
  Now with th
• acederequizaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Now, where do I start?
  Let's do it by breaking down the review. It's a long read. Hopefully you don't mind. If it's TLDR; just go to the bottom.
  Style: 4/5
  As I read through from chapter 1 to chapter 5, your style has inproved dramatically. It has a casual style to which I like. Nothing heavy and it's a simple read. However, you can improve on a few things further to make this novel more engaging.
  - You tend to overly describe something but neglected to describe something else that was important. For example, you tend to overly described Kaia's dress and Alex's look but did not describe anything else in between. For example, the gala and auction is supposed to be a peak of one's achievement, but nothing was done to describe it. How was the layout, the view, the people, who are they and why are they there. The marriage was rushed and that was the most important scene since that scene made the two MCs come together. When Alex saved Kaia, I felt that it was out of nowhere. It's too simple with 3-4 sentences and then next I knew, the MC popped out the big question. It's supposed to be romantic right?
  - Purple prose are alright if you can balance it out throught out story. Don't choose to explain in detail in one area and neglect the other. Spend some time to describe the scene like what you did with the villa's view. High society people are OCDs and they tend to be perfectionist in everything they do. That include what they wear, the way they eat, talk etc.
  Story: 3.5/5
  A typical romance story so I should not look into logics of how a romance started. I read lots of romance novel courtesy of my wife's collection and some even started with much more unrealistic introduction. However, there are a few things that you could polish up for the your story to become more gripping. These are some of the ideas that you can use:-
  - Arranged marriage? When was the arranged marriage done? When Kaia was in her teens? When she was a toddler? Or younger than that or before she was even
• BigMartyrsRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  I think this story could be very successful. As it is now though it needs some polishing.
  The characters where pretty well developed. Would have given 5 stars here if you "showed" me what the characters are like more, instead of telling me. You definetely know who they are and what they should be doing.
  The style gave me 50 shades of grey vibe.
  The story has some major plot holes that could be filled by just filling in the first few chapters more. Maintaining mystery is fine, but a major concern like, "why are there arranged marriages in this story?" needs to be addressed sooner rather than later.
  Grammar was pretty bad. To maintain an honest review I feel like I should explain. I would have given you a lower score, but suprisingly, the errors didn't stop me from understanding the story. They did however keep me from getting immersed in it. Noone here really expects a professionally edited story, but you should definetely edit it yourself.
  I will keep reading so I can discover the mysteries of this book!