Harmless Sweetie (Rewritten)

Self-Published

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*UPDATES EVERY MONDAY AND FRIDAY, SOMETIMES MORE IF I DON'T HAVE SCHOOLWORK.

**This is tagged as comedy but I have a really stupid and peculiar sense of humor so yeah.

"That's an eldritch horror."

"No it's not, it's a frog."

"Why does it have ten eyes and eight rows of teeth, not just that but why does it just perpetually scream with the voices of the ones whose mind it has eaten."

"I'm just not that good at anatomy."

***

Clailip Diancia, the tiny boy who dances along the threads of fate woven by a wicked witch.

Not knowing of the plans of the witch that once scorched the lands, and unknowing of the abyss that beckons him forth. This harmless sweetie watches the stories of those around him. Ever unconscious of the turning loom of fate, always oblivious of the stories, legends, and tapestries of heroes that revolve around him as he goes, as he dances, and as he prances, leaving myths and rumours wherever he might set foot in.

But as he is unaware of those whose fates have intertwined with his, he is also blind to the soul-piercing stares of the Abyss, ever calling to him.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Hexenblume

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 5.0/ 5.0
Followers: 12
Views: 6,293

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

kieranpierceRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Harmless Sweetie is taking a fresh premise to the litRPG genre! You always got to wonder where the powerful kids are, but it looks like he's right here. :D
No matter what Clailip does, he will always be perceived as harmless per his ability [Harmless Sweetie]. This is a really fun premise for the story because it's both an intriguing ability that can be leveraged in multiple situations. (Imagine him being an assassin. He wouldn't even have to be discrete cause no one would believe he could hurt anybody!) It also could work the other way where he can't intimidate someone for the life of him....
Plus, there's so much potential for comedic effect, it'll be great fun to see where this goes! Presently, Clailip is a boy with his army of toys thanks to the skill [Toymaker]. He feels great as a character.
For style, my only small criticism would be to find a way to merge the information in the footnotes organically into the story. I do appreciate the footnotes because I have practically no knowledge of Filipino culture, but I also can't help but feel it could be merged into the story in a natural way. (The fact that Gabbie knows arnis is cool, but if she's being reincarnated, is Clailip going to know arnis?)
Lastly, the grammar gets 5-stars from me. Even though the author isn't a native speaker and sometimes has really tiny mistakes, they produce better prose than some native speakers. It's worthy of 5-stars.
(Also, I read some of this before the rewrite, and I just want to say congrats to the author for improving so much!)