God Blade (Hiatus)

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Description

Theo, a prodigy of sword and an aspiring adventurer, lives in an RPG-like world where everyone has their own level and skill. However, his is a hardcore RPG world where more than half of its human never gets higher than level one.

Well, No. Theo is a man born in that world. An NPC you might say. Not only that, he wasn't even the true hero or the main protagonist of his own world. But he does have to meet all those people during his journey to accomplish his dream.

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1 chapter every 2 or 3 days.

I don't claim the MC of my story to be not cliched. With so many stories on the internet right now, It's almost impossible if not outright impossible to make an original MC. The best I can do is pick the kind of cliched MC I like the most and give it a twist of my own.

English is not my first language, so there will be some mistakes in every chapter. Please notify me in the comment if you found one (Or some). I'm still an inexperienced writer, so feedbacks and reviews are very much appreciated.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: ketu0

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 390
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Community Reviews(7)

Soul RiverRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Why do you have to make the titles so good man? Come on... be a little low profile... I'm just pulling your leg... this is a good piece. I enjoy it a lot. Alright you win, it's awesome, great, beautiful, rainbowy....... I ran out of words.
FolkensedaiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
as a fan, i can only support your story !
it's an enjoyable read.
but beware, the author dont know what tense sequencing means.
anvistarRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Okay, this is my first review and I don't really know how to make review, but I will try.
Style:
Don't really know what this mean because the guide says about the general feeling of the fiction. The POV is third person with the main focus being the MC(Duh!) Sometimes it changed focus to his companion and enemies, but still in third person.
The action scene is good. The story is pretty serious, but there are some humor and self-referential 4th wall break joke sprinkled around. The author integrate those 4th wall break joke pretty well into the story.
Story:
I like the story. The MC is strong but not so OP. He struggle with some enemies while steamrolled other. One of the thing that I like is that the MC actually get injured in a fight, and the wound last for some time, affecting his next few battle (Not in a major way though. Not yet atleast.). The MC also has a lot of hidden tricks up his sleeve.
The MC is born in RPG world. Screen, dungeon, skill, and level up is everyday things for him. There's also some nods to illogical game physics like how women's armor covered so little of their skin and still somehow works. It's a harem story with the MC already having a sizeable harem at the start of the story and he actively trying to expand his harem.
I like how there's prophecy, Demon King, and super powered system protagonist, but the MC is none of that. The MC best friend is kind of Dovahkin btw.
Spoiler: Spoiler
I like how in the succesion war, both faction are bad. And when the MC is given 3 choices, the choices are, bad, worse, and worse.
Grammar:
I might be biased in this section since I'm not that good in english. There are some mistake in each chapter, but nothing serious (For me at least). The author is quick at fixing mistake(s) once you tell him the mistake in the comment, so that's a plus.
Character:
The MC is not a good person while not evil. He do what he think is the best for him and his women. His action is usually more to the good side, but that because
mask19Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I've really enjoyed this story so far. The main character is OP and is dead set on his 3 goals (1 of them being hilarious). The story flows very well and I would like to see where it goes.
-Hope this gets a better ranking later!
ScandalfRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
You know those novels, the ones you enjoy a lot while reading them but when you take a break for a few minutes and think about the things that had happened you realize there are quite some plot holes and annoying stuff that break the flow of the story? This is one of those.
Story has an interesting start. With a MC that is ambitious for all types of things (power, women, money etc.) and yet kinda laid back and lazy. He has a bit of a mysterious history(and a fucked up one which you slowly learn over time) and interesting personality that is both serious and jokester and he even has a harem at the start of the story.
So... While you're reading this, what you realize first is the style and grammar. They are both very simple. There are no "advanced" techniques or fancy words used. Because english isn't authors' first language. This is pretty obvious looking at the grammar. Not saying grammar is bad though, don't get me wrong. But if you read it carefully, you will notice quite a bit of small mistakes. Though since they are all small ones, they don't really affect the meaning of sentences so it's okay for the most part.
Then what you'll notice is the characters. A protagonist that is really cool and chill, a dream main character basically. It's soo fun reading about him. Then there is his girlfriend(s), they are all chill with him having other girls, since they already know about him having other girls before becoming lovers with him. They have good personalities as well, not complaining about every little thing, giving him support whenever he needs it, actually depending on him instead of hiding everything from him and trying to solve the problems by themselves. And stuff like that.
Characters are all good until then. Then slowly more and more characters are introduced(duh) and you realize, almost every single new character you are introduced after like 20th chapter or something, is annoying as f**k.(And MC expreciences quite a bit of a difference in personality around
MaromarRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I would be hard pressed to find a more apt title for this novel than God Blade. It sums up the main appeal and a great portion of the main issues to be found here in one neat little package. More on that later.
This is a harem/lit-rpg, one that bleeds its first genre rather heavily into its second. Blatantly sexual stories don’t get much love from me. I personally believe that they cut corners quite a bit and drown their character development arcs with so much fan service that consumers are better off switching to porn. With my own biases in mind, I tried my best to remove the metal bits from my metaphorical lash while reading.
I may have failed, but that’s for the thumbs to decide.
The grammar and style sits in a semi-comfortable spot for this site. There’s some odd phrasing here and there, some chewy paragraphs - you know, standard stuff, but the prose is eloquent enough to paint scenes beyond stick figure quality. Unfortunately, that’s all the praise I can offer it. It’s fuzzy, but readable. Enlisting an editor’s assistance would be a wise decision.
The world comes across as mildly interesting yet disappointingly standard, not due to the existence of staple lit-rpg tropes and events, but due to the lack of interaction depth with them. Much promise is displayed near the beginning, Ed’s story arc nabs quite a bit of interest when he unearths his destiny as a world-ordained hero while not being the main character. It hints at inroads that are not entirely dependent on Theo, it hints at a world that functions as a world. It’s dangled in front of the reader’s faces and thrown into a chasm, never spoken of again, save for in passing, until tens of chapters later.
In the meantime, we have a montage of Theo chopping up men and monsters, taking jobs on his way to and in the capital, and expanding his party roster a bit. All with middling stakes or stress. The first traveling stint serves us some minor exposition and some major feats of strength and skill on Theo’s part.
gyro2deathRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This series starts off pretty strong, with a protag who would fit the arch rival archtype pretty well. He also is powerful, has a harem already and is keeping up a nice guy act while being a bit more wicked.
The problem comes when he starts just being dumb, which happens after he leaves the city around chapter 11. After that point he does various things which no logical person would do. It is however passable until chapter 17 in which case he goes full retard and only doesn't meet a horrible end because of plot armor. The MC is an idiot who puts himself in a huge risk for no reward. There are other flaws like how he doesn't actually have a concrete personality, not that he just switches between roles but that there doesn't appear to a true personality. His personality is what fits the authors whims for that scene.
Really is a shame because the start showed a lot of interesting promise with all the development but just threw it away for a random adventure so the MC could become stupid for some reason.