Gobbo

Self-Published

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Description

Its not easy being green. Or any other color. Life's just kinda shit in general.

At least it is for a goblin trying to survive on their own. I'll admit I've burned a few bridges, but in my defense, they were oh so flammable, and burned beautifuly. At any rate, I'm an exile now, scraping by in human lands, where pitchforks and torches are always just around the corner. I'd look for a better life, but I've got my hands full just staying alive when any random asshole could turn out to be a retired adventurer strong enough to hold ten bulls above their head with one hand tied behind their back.

How did they pull that bullshit anyway?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: AssaultPenguin

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 206
Views: 156,012

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Community Reviews(4)

KO_KingRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is one to watch! Quality stuff!
i like the magic system, familiar but unique. Great start, if you like goblins you’ll love this!
Peculiarflame86Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Because whoever on high does this author have a solid grasp on his. Nothing that any character does is out of character. And better yet, we aren't having our hands held and told that. We get shown! We properly experience the world through the eyes of our protagonist. If that somehow, in some way sounds like a terrible thing to you, this book/writings aren't for you. But for those who like that, you have found a wonderful hidey-hole!
dak'konRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Well written, Interesting world, and an (anti?)hero who actually uses his head. Seriously, this is probably one of the few stories that show and not tell in this regard.
Give it a try. You will be pleasantly surprised.
The true NarratorRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Mr. Assualtpenguin I know you wanted constructive criticism so I will offer you my honest thoughts.
Your story is well written in many places but also disjointed and jarring, It is not uncommon for the protag to go on long tangents and frankly the story lacks a well-defined plot outside of 'goblin survives and gets stronger.'
I recommend that you also introduce breaks from the protags perspective, as constantly seeing everything from only Zhens perspective can become tiring to a reader and even annoying in the worst case.
I have given some criticism, now I share some praise.
You clearly have done some research or simply paid attention in high school, the various tidbits of information being relatively concise and sensical in nature, and the selection or vocabulary of words you employ are wide-ranging and appreciated.
That said, (going back to constructive critiquing) many typo's and verbal flaws exist throughout your writing, they lessen greatly in the later chapters but still persist even then.
Hopefully, you can iron those out entirely from future chapters, if you continue writing.
Regarding characters you have shown throughout the story, none presently matter except for the protag, all of them only being temporary characters of little import that, so far, do not greatly affect the story.
True, some of the shown cast may give the protag useful gear when they perish or give us the readers, a chance to better understand Zhen's past and motivations, but for the most part, all characters simply act as a means for the protag to acquire what he wants before they disappear into the void.
Something about that needs to change, we need other people outside of Zhen to attach to, (and as I said earlier we need someone so we can have a break from Zhen).
Moving on further to discuss characters, we come to the protag, Zhen.
Zhen is an interesting character and I can certainly feel your personality and views funneling through him, it is not a bad thing, but it is something that c